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Welcome back everyone!

I’m going to keep this short and sweet. Below the double-divider will be all six of the entries we received. Vote on your favorites by pinging our vote account: i.e. I @vote for Entry Zero because why the heck not? Discussion is encouraged, and feel free to review any and all entries. Final votes are due at objective midnight on May 31st.

In this edition we’re going to be trying something new – the panel of staff is going to be reviewing the entries and coming together to make a staff pick, in addition to the community favorite. Bonus categories are to be awarded as usual.

Thank you all. If you have any questions PM me or @mention me here.











This concludes the entries. Best of luck to everyone who participated.
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Congratulations to whomever wrote Shattered Realities for being a clever, clever bastard. :D I enjoyed that, even though you made me scroll. A lot. :P
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Solid entries, all. Hope to get reviews out in the coming days.
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Whoop! Looking forward to finish reading.

And, uhm, y'all can possibly expect another round of Blitz's Unhelpful Reviews™.
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The Wind That Is Dark And Carries With It Some Reviews And A Title That Is Needlessly Poetic In Essence. Seriously Who Does This Guy Think He Is?









In the end, I think I've actually given serious pro's and con's for every one of these. All of you could have received my vote for one reason or another.

But, with the conclusion of these reviews... My @vote goes to Shattered Realities. Complete, well-written, intelligent, successfully horrifying, and a thoroughly entertaining commentary on fiction itself.

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YAY REVIEWS *flails*








No vote yet. I must ponder. And brood. And also eat dinner.

Also, I don't know why, but my computer keeps putting random line breaks in my writing. Sorry about that. Smh.
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My @vote also has got to go to Shattered Realities. That story was ridiculously good.
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Let's get some more votes up in this house, peeps!!!!
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My @vote goes to The Unknown Heroes. I just love it too much and I like how it fits the theme.

Windy, I love how your tagline went from artsy "Sky Traveler" to "Summon the bitches"
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@Blitz

A man has many faces.

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also it's probably the greatest video game line ever of all time
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I'm gonna give my @vote to Shattered Realities.

To the author: You may have noticed, but the way I wrote my piece was intended to freak the reader out. I feel like you did a lot better at that than me. The repetitiveness got to me a little, I didn't like reading the same paragraph 3-5 times (I felt like I was missing some small details or something), but as a literary tool you did well using it to add to the setting. Good job.

To everyone: Bravo. I enjoyed each of the stories, and it was actually really hard for me to choose which story to vote for. I can't wait to see what other awesome stories the next prompt will bring us!
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After careful consideration my @vote goes to shattered realities as well, not because it was the best story told (with several good stories the decision couldn't be based on just that), but because of the originality of how it was written. Some serious thought and effort went into the make-up of the piece and that shows. Every part of it is just very clever and it's a great piece.
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The Grey Dust Unofficial Dismal Reviews.














So when all is said and done,
And reading what they've wrote,
All stories where truly fun,
But only one may get my vote.

My @vote goes to The Six Truths.
Complete and well-written, befitting the theme, foreshadowed and unveiled, an ending I saw coming but enjoyed anyways.

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@The Grey Dust Thanks for the review! I wrote Latum Alterum.

You and Dark Wind had similar issues with my story, the general lack of deeper meaning or a connection to the main character that could create such a meaning. In truth, I felt the same. For some reason, it just didn't occur to me to narrate the story from Theo's emotions—something which I almost always do. It felt more like a true "3rd person" story, with the narrator revealing hardly anything through description about the main character's emotions other than what happens concretely. Unfortunately, I submitted the entry knowing this all too well which is a sin on my part.

The story was trying to pump water out of an already-dry well for me. My most recent writer's block had been pretty bad honestly, but I think without the stress from school, forcing myself to write the story (despite the flaws), and reading books more is helping to pull me out.

Thanks again for taking the time to review! Hopefully you'll see some improvement from me in the future.
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No no my friend, thank you for giving me something to read.

Hopefully, despite my claim to "dismal reviews" you found my judgment fair and constructive?
If not please feel free to correct me, as these are after all merely opinions I have when reading.
And don't be too disappointed, Every story after all, was good, none were flat out things I'd rip apart easily.
So I'd hope I could focus in on an aspect I thought could use some work or expanding, some narrative feedback if you will.

And don't worry Writer's block happens to all of us. It just takes awhile to think of something. And even longer to find the motivation to write it out. So please don't take out of it any misconception that anyone failed to meet my standards, no all of the submitters did indeed impress me with their ideas and work. Just take my worthless two cents or leave it, I'm just one person with my ideas, so nothing is more important than find your own inspiration for a story to call your own. But either way, be proud of what you've made. It's good, but remember that you aren't alone in being good, and that everyone always strives for better :)

I look forward to your next anonymous submission. Although it was pretty clear who wrote what after reading your review and having omitted yourself from a critique (yes I read what others have to say too, it's good practice to know what others think of the stories you read). And let's see if I can pick up on the nuances of your writing style so the next time.
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No, I appreciate your two cents! It's not always people get writing advice while doing a typical RP so it's nice to get it here.

Also, ohmygosh, the "YOU STINK, LOSER" wasn't for whoever chose to read my own review. It was my own opinion of my story. Hopefully no one thought it was an insult lol
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Reviews.

These are not gentle. Though they are not cruel.



My @vote is for The Sixth Truths. Which could have been better, but was nonetheless well-written.
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@Terminal I don't mind you posting your review here if you want.
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@TerminalOh dear, now I'm nervous XD

I appreciate you gave me the option for private critique, but I don't mind if you post the review here.
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