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Aaand I just realised I never got that character sheet done, and it's one in the morning now...

Welp! Looks like tomorrows gonna be a pretty busy one!
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Aaand I just realised I never got that character sheet done, and it's one in the morning now...

Welp! Looks like tomorrows gonna be a pretty busy one!

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Aaand I just realised I never got that character sheet done, and it's one in the morning now...

Welp! Looks like tomorrows gonna be a pretty busy one!


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Will be reviewing sheets tomorrow, to which people will have a chance to make edits until Friday.
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Got Akane finished, was pretty busy this weekend.
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Alright! Took me the better part of a day, but I finally put something together that seemed halfway decent! I think I may have accidentally made him depressed though, which is a far darker direction than I had planned when I started. Trying to stay optimistic though, so it just means he now has a character arc up and ready to go!

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10/25/18 Finished fist draft, edited to fix suggestions.


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Reviews incoming:

@Hero@Quincy I don't have any issue with your characters from what I can see.

@Harlequ I have a few minor nitpicks. There are a few grammar mistakes (such as Erusia, when it should be Erusea), and the extra spaces at each new segment could probably be dropped. Also, you can drop the Other section if you're not using it, or just write N/A.

@Magio Okay, this isn't really a point, but I just wanted to say that I found your quote funny. Back when I was in junior high, PE had just ended and we were heading back inside. However, someone decided they were going to punt the football back into the field, but my, uh... forehead was in the way, and the football clonked me right in the head and knocked my glasses off. I suppose Dae and I are alike in one way or another.

Anyway, back to the actual review: I like the CS, but I do have some issues. Are you going to use the blue you have listed at the top of the CS? If so, can you replace the spring green section headers with that color? I'd also would prefer that you included the gray text to the information within each section to keep things uniform. You might want to center his quote too. Other than that, my only complaint is the biography section. I understand that his sister opposed his desires, but is that why he was sent to his uncle? I do think you could expand on it, perhaps with that event being a driving factor for Dae in the roleplay.

@liferusher As I said in the previous review, please replace the spring green headers with the hexcode you used for the character name header. I do feel as the likes and dislikes section is somewhat messy, so it might be best to fix it up a bit. You can also nix the Other section if you don't plan on using it or just put N/A.

@geminironin Some sections, such as the Physical Description and Personality sections, are rather light and vague. If you could expand on them some more, it would be appreciated. Also, just a minor nitpick, but if you could keep to the format of the CS (subbed section headers, gray text), that also would be appreciated, too.

Edit: @Rabidporcupine Sorry, I forgot to drop a review for you too since I missed your CS, but they're just cosmetic nitpicks. As said before, please keep to the same color as your character name header for the section colors, as well the gray text. Also, if you could drop the centered sections, that would be appreciated.
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@Sola All (hopefully) fixed up!
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Um, how do I make the text grey like that again?I'm still kinda stupid about formatting. I edited the rest though.
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Um, how do I make the text grey like that again?I'm still kinda stupid about formatting. I edited the rest though.


The format cs has the command [color=gray] at the start and [/color] at the end or you can do it for each seqment individually
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@geminironin Some sections, such as the Physical Description and Personality sections, are rather light and vague. If you could expand on them some more, it would be appreciated. Also, just a minor nitpick, but if you could keep to the format of the CS (subbed section headers, gray text), that also would be appreciated, too.


I'm not quite sure how to do subbed sections, is it just an [indent] at the beginning of each text block? And I will add some more to those sections later today.
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I'm not quite sure how to do subbed sections, is it just an [indent] at the beginning of each text block? And I will add some more to those sections later today.


[sub] and [/sub] which is used for the lets say Gender or Backstory

[indent] and [/indent] which is used for the lets say Female or the back story itself
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@SolaI revised my sheet I hope it is alright now
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@liferusher
Cool, thanks!
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Alright, everything's ready now.
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A'ight, I'll bite. Let's see what I can pull outta my hindquarters.
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Code is super simple and ez. Just use template.
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