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@Reflection, @KawaiiKyouko, @Anza, and @King Cosmos
All of your characters are ok.
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@Anza

Your Master is ok as well.
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@Kyoka

Ibaraki is fine. You can move her to the CS tab.

It might benefit you to get a Master that can handle a Superior Servant, otherwise she might be unlikely to fight at her fullest because she's a real mana drain if she goes full ham.
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Alright...here, finally, is my Master character!

As for his Superior Boon, I was trying to find what category it might fit in. In the end I just put it as it is, and will see what you feel it should better be labeled as! :P


Edit: Reworked my master app, and hope it works better than my first idea! :)

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@Crusader Lord
Your Master is mostly alright as well. However, there are a few minor issues here and there. Most of them are just notes to make him more thematically unified though.

First and foremost, this is just a comment, but I'd say that Astromancy and Modern Magecraft Studies don't have much to do with the actual specialty of the character with seems to be dealing with plants. That's were the Faculty of Botany has their forte. A mage rarely is a student of a single Faculty, though. More often than not the people who are associated with a single branch are only staff. At any rate you don't need to change this, I'm just commenting because it seems like the intention of his magecraft and the way he accomplishes it aren't meant to work together.

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In his own magecraft studies, however, Johann has innovated a certain line of techniques based on the ‘habits’ he gained while at the Clock Tower. Dubbed the “Joint Method”, it basically involves the creation and use of magcraft-treated joints utilizing different kinds of astrologically-aligned plants in order to produce different magical effects. The pinnacle of this innovative technique is something he has dubbed simply “The Weed Dragon”: By smoking a specially prepared joint containing a combination of prepared plants associated with each planet, he creates a temporary ‘inner universe’ in his lungs that allows him to recreate/use a dragon’s breath.

I hope you mean this only in a figurative sense. Because breathing raw prana infused with elemental attributes is something way beyond the scope of even Grand Ritual level magecraft. Now, if it's just smoking really nasty stuff and using it as a medium for fire magecraft, it's fine (that's one of Touko's favorite tricks after all). The problem is that he doesn't have a fire affinity. He isn't unable to use fire-based magecraft because of that but he would be rather bad at it. Certainly not something that would be worth of a figurative title of dragon's breath.

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You deal with 3 or so foundations in your CS. While that isn't impossible (many older families have a number of different Foundations burried in their crests simply because they picked them through time) it's hardly something worth it to dabble into so many unrelated fields and try to be an expert in them all. A mage certainly can be a master of the fundamentals (Such as Waver and Rin) but a true genius level expert rarely dips in more than one field (see Kayneth).

You might want to make your character more focused to earn that classification.

Your boon is ok, but just like the rest of the points above, it doesn't mix well with a character with a focus all over the place.

You don't need to change anything except for either his elements or the potency of his Eire magecraft (but if you do that you need to adjust the others correctly since plants would likely draw on Earth and would be weakened if the fire is strengthened). But know that, ultimately he'll be a very wasteful character so his powers might be limited during the RP to compensate for the breadth of his abilities.
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Your Master is very much alright. You can move him to the CS tab as well.
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@Crusader Lord Well, let's see:

-Suitcases of Supplies: Include plenty of prepared magic bullets, money, clothes, a pair of subtly purchased Mystic Eye Killers from a certain mage for self-protection, packs of joints and lighters he added to it all, an advanced first aid kit, and other things generally needed to stay and get by day to day in an isolated place such as Black Rock for the duration of a Holy Grail War.


You don't need to mention general supplies. You don't need to remove this but it's redundant. I'm mentioning it more to clarify that to the other players sine they might think they should add this as well. I'm not going to pull a "You don't have it written in your CS, then you don't have it in the RP" as long as what you are doing makes sense. Things like Mystic Eyes Killers and Azoth Blades, reagents, etc. are commonplace Mystic Codes that most Magi will have hanging around at all times.

Superior Mystic Code - Johann has two replicas of a Primeval Rune. These runes, indestructible by magecraft, are able to amplify the curses of his other runes by tens of millions of times. His family has given him these for use in the Holy Grail War, primarily to try to help keep him alive.

Not even the original Primordial Runes are indestructible, other wise they wouldn't need to be kept on a vault in the Wandering Sea to avoid degradation. Also, I hope the second part is hyperbole, again. Because this is beyond even the levels of the greatest Noble Phantasms.

Lastly, it would be helpful to know what kinds of curses he's specialized on since they aren't mentioned anywhere else in the CS.
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Am I allowed to take over the Red Caster or Black Assassin? Or are those strangely set in place?
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@Sosuke Neither spot has gotten that far. If you want to fill either role, that is fine with us. It'll be more than easy to simply replace them.
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Then I suppose I'll reserve the Assassin of Black for now... I intend on Apping Zahhak, the Evil Persian King.
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@Sosuke Alright, but be aware, that depending on his strength, we may request that he be treated as a superior servant, and as such you'd only be able to pair with a Master who picked the Superior servant buff.
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@Sosuke Alright, but be aware, that depending on his strength, we may request that he be treated as a superior servant, and as such you'd only be able to pair with a Master who picked the Superior servant buff.


He's merely the king, not the demon that people believed him as. He's not Aži Dahāka in this form, maybe as Berserker.
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@Sylph de Graaf
I'll look at her in detail when she's finished. There isn't much to evaluate there yet.

Am I allowed to take over the Red Caster or Black Assassin? Or are those strangely set in place?


What @Reflection said.
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Well Assassin left so I might aswell fill in.


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