Hedgehawk

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

Well everyone, here we are, the end of our first cycle.

Thank you for posting everyone. @Sylvan I look forward to seeing you post as well. Unfortunately, since @Ghost Note has not posted and not given a reason as to why, I am going to have to issue a first strike.

The deadline for next posts will be Wednesday 20th May. I will get the next posts up in the next few hours, or worst case, just before i go to sleep.

Hedge

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

Hope everyone is enjoying the RP so far. So, finally deadline for posts is still Tuesday 5th May. I know most people have posted. @Sylvan I know you only just got accepted, so you don't have to post for the deadline.

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

@Sylvan Yeah Accepted, Move on across :)

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

@Ghost Note Just a polite nudge and reminder that the deadline is 5th May. If you forsee any difficulties in posting do let me know :)

Hi!

Welcome. I am sure you will find some great writers here to start writing with :)

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

@Viper Commando Thank you for understanding and heeding my words.

I don't want to come off as rude, or brash, so please excuse me if this comes off as direct: Do you know the difference between yourself a character? I only ask as in your previous post you are using the first person to describe the experiences that both you, and the character you submitted for the RP have been through. I sense that alot of this may be lost in translation. I am guessing in real life you are part of some ranger group, scouts maybe??? And there you studied archery and swordsmanship?

If that is the case: Awesome! You are a far better man than I will ever be! I can't barely go outside without nature trying to attack me in some way. However, you do realise that a shade is not real? Shades might exist in a fantasy universe, but in this mortal realm they do not. We don't need dungeoneers in this world. I hope that makes sense.

I just want to ask these questions, not to make fun of you or to attack you, but to help you understand. I would hate for you to carry on like this and go to another RP where perhaps the GM is not so considerate and perhaps you were attacked. I would hate to see an incident like that happen.

As for the other things:

- Very few of the officer cadets are pompous or elitist. In fact. In terms of player controlled characters, I don't think there is a single elitist one.

- Your next point ties in with what I said above. When you speak in first person, everyone assumes you are talking about yourself. As in you. The OOC writer. Therefore writing in first person only confuses things. For Roleplays third person is default. Also, general English rule: Never swap between first, second and third person. Never write in the second person either.

- This kind of proves my point that you really should read everything carefully rather than skim reading it. There had been questions regarding Scandinavian countries yes. But, we wee discussing crating a new country inspired by the Scandinavian region. Not picking one of the countries.

- In terms of an Air Force. It is great if your father was in the air force. I am sure he served Poland proudly during his time! However glossing over the obvious mixing real life with Roleplay issue we have already discussed, I don't think a hot air balloon air force would have worked. I am not great at history, but I am fairly sure the hot air balloon came about alot later. I am sure there is a history buff in this thread that will correct me on that!

Overall, I don't want you to feel discouraged about Roleplaying from this experience. Instead I would love for you to learn and move on and go join another amazing adventure.

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

@Viper Commando As a follow on from my previous post, since you posted while I was typing. It is generally frowned upon in the community if you post your character into the 'characters' tab and then also decide to post in the IC. If you were to do this in other RPs you would probably find yourself getting banned from them.

P.S. In your IC post you mentioned it was still dusk. But the IC post at the top says that it is 8am, so Dawn. Asides from that, you wrote two decent paragraphs. If you work on writing in third person and being slightly more accurate with your wording, you will be well on your way!

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@Viper Commando Thank you for taking the time to create a character sheet for this RP. I am sorry for not replying to your earlier post. I have been having a relaxing weekend and have only managed to deal with this now.

After looking at your character your character sheet, I have unfortunately decided to reject your character. Going through the sheet I have found multiple issues that raise red flags with me that make me believe that you wouldn't be a good fit for this RP. There are quite a few points so I will keep it as short as I can:

Firstly, your character sheet is written in first person. If you read the current IC posts and the other accepted characters, you will see that they are in the third person. I hadn't put in the rules that it was third person only. I had hoped that is was more of an unspoken rule. So that's my fault.

Secondly, going through the sheet, I saw that you mentioned that his reason for joining the officers program was that he didn't want to be on it? Thought out the sheet there are plenty of these contradictions that make reading the sheet quite difficult and confusing.

Thirdly, I mean this politely, but I do not believe you have fully grasped the lore of this Roleplay or the concept. Looking through your sheet, you mention the country Poland, which doesn't exist in this RP as well as a mention of an airforce, which considering this is the 1400's is most certainly not right.

As a final price of parting advice:I would heavily advise against Self-Inserting yourself as a character. It reveals your real name and leaves you open to creeps and people who might wish to be nasty or cause harm. Plus to alot of GMs, it can come off as lazy and not putting any effort into your character.

I hope that you understand my reasons for your rejection, and I wish you well on your future endeavours.

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

Okay, Starter is up for everyone. Nice and simple to start us off and to introduce our characters. Simply get them to the dining hall. The official deadline is the 5th May. However I have a feeling we will easily beat that. Any questions feel free to ask.

Estermere Academy - Military School RP

Monday 7th September - 8.00am

Since the early hours of the morning the academy of Estermere was in full swing. The staff were making the final few adjustments needed to the academy so that everything was ready. The second and third year students had arrived on the friday before and had spent the weekend settling in and helping set up for the new inductees to arrive.

The first day was always promised to be a good one. The look on the students faces, meeting each other for the new time. So many new faces to remember and names to learn. Many friends to make and rivals to earn. Who was going to rise to the top this year? And who was going to sag to the bottom? It was almost impossible to tell most of the time at the beginning. Though it didn't stop the staff from taking bets on who they thought would succeed.

The new students had been given a simple instruction: Arrive at the main gate, drop off your belongings with the guards and then make your way to the dining hall where the welcome assembly would begin at 8.30am. At this point most of the students had already made their way there and were now eagerly awaiting the start of the school year.