@Etcetera
This is awesome. There are a couple of areas that seemed a bit non-flowy (mostly around the top) so I'll fix those later and tell you each change.
Also, for the hook line, how about "Boundless Ideas, Infinite Worlds"?
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Life is a story. The only thing that can change is your perspective on it. Is it just another story, or is it reality?
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Probably because we are getting busier. It's our senior year, we have a bit of a rush of things right now. After we graduate, I am pretty sure we will be back to how we were. We still have our drive and love.
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It's gone from life to an rp. That started it. Add to that a loss of people and a shift in priorities and you have this.
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Dane: ... Want to go see if he's okay?
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Dane: big bad guy, Crimson Armada, and I'm sure more are to come.. They had to declare war at a time like this...
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Hm.. I suppose I can wait here until he arrives.. That is okay, right?
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The joke has been smothered
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Kyen: definitely. *looks around*
So.. I am to find the one named Shinji and train under him.. Is he here?
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Kyen:
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This is a nice place, here. It's so cold outside, though.. It's pretty barren, too, spare a couple of mountains...
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