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@KoLso I don't know if this is my fault for not making it more clear but Avi's face is hardly rugged ^^' infact the character sheet plainly refers to his face as "fine" I'm not normally a stickler for character appearance but it's kind of important that the character come off with atleast lyrics mildly deccent looks. This is all just for future reference.


Sorry, I let the sailor archetype fool me for once. Either way, in Claudia's case you can consider it yandere-vision, hehehe.
Oh damn, things have rolled fast here. I'll try my best to post tonight once I'm back from college.

"My... my, what's it that we have here?" Claudia Blair, a recently commissioned junior officer of the City Guard, sized up the man that had just walked to her while she was about to go do some paperwork. Older, taller and more muscular, with ragged looks that matched his rough mannerisms. In other words, a typical adventurer that must have come from a background in some harsh job, if hardened, leather-like skin of his face was any indication.

"Interesting, Fufufu..." The blonde was silent as the man made his objective known, liking her lips slowly as her eyes seized him, like a wolf glaring at a cowered hare. "Well now, if it's not an adventurer? If you want to sign for the mission all you need to do is talk with the clerk on the other side of the entrance lobby and pay the administrative fee of ten silver." Claudia pointed to the unassuming clerk that stood by the other side of the lobby. "However, I wouldn't take on this task alone if I were you. We have reports of increase activity of beasts on some areas of the Old City. Better be prepare than become one more report for I to review, right? Fufufu!" Apparently, Claudia was the only one laughing at her own bleak humor, despite having actually provided some useful information, she just couldn't help but do that. Probably one of the reasons why people tended to stay clear from her.

"Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to go. I have some theft reports to handle that I can't delay, or else I'll never get to the murders. Fufufu." Claudia turned on her heels and began to strut back to her office. Before the blonde left the room for good, she turned back once more and said, "If you still need more help, ask Viola, she should be coming from a patrol at any moment now. Farewell."

Either way, the two approaching forms of Kreiss and Elnarial would also be able to pick on the tail of that conversation, whether they wanted to do anything of it or not, was up to them.
Ok, then, another set of reviews inbound.

@PentagonWhite: Accepted.

@duskshine749: Accepted as well. It would help me greatly if you placed you CS in a hider when you add it to the character tab.

@The1Rolling1Boy: Better, but not there yet with the writing style. Let me give you a couple more recommendations. 1st, remove those asterisks. You don't need them to indicate a narration/action on your text, as anything that's not between dual quotation marks, is automatically taken as narration in normal writing. Serious, that's the #01 problem, a vice that is confusing and useless. 2nd, add punctuation, you went through the whole paragraph without using a single period. How people are supposed to read that when they don't know when a sentence ends and the other begins? I hope this helps you figure what proper prose writing is.
@Lucius Cypher I wonder, does Krieg enjoy destruction or fighting? If no one else is fighting back, will he just go "Well.. This is no fun." and stop?


For God's sake, don't comment on the lack of logic behind Graf suddenly dropping the fight after he went berserk. Believe in me, it's better that you don't get in this kind of questioning. You won't like what will happen if someone takes your comment as an offense.
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Isn't it? Unless we count Flos and the STLTH Unit.


No, because Juno is mostly out of it, at this moment.
@TheWindel@Lonewolf685

I was just answering the question of whether Juno vs Graf was the last fight happening, which it's not.
So, is Grafdakka vs Juno the only fight left to do, everyone else is standing around talking and word of the trade is going down?


I... would like to not be the one to reply this question, to avoid any possible misinterpretation of my words but, anyway since no one else cared to address it before, I'll do so.

Well, you are right and wrong. At the moment the only one still fighting is Grafdaka, who's mad with his power. Juno was seriously injured after being caught by a literal sucker punch. In other words, good luck for those who wish to pick up on him and end this battle.
I can do a partial post once I get some replies, but at the time being I'm kinda stuck.

Probably will not get anything out this week, I guess.
O.o'

That last post from Cassandra:

"... I don't mind getting wet... but if possible, not from a dunk tank."


Does this mean that Cassie would like to get wet from other sources? That's an... interesting thought to keep in mind.
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