KoL

Hikari Academy

@Sync

He's alright. Move him to the CS tab and then you can post IC.

The War of the Three: Exodus

@Gardevoiran

It's alright for me.

Hikari Academy

@Awesomoman64

Roland really wants Reiko to teach him a special lesson, doesn't he?

Hikari Academy

@Sync

I think that your character will need some adjustments before he can be approved. Here are the points you'll need to address, in no specific order:

- Make the text more readable. There are quite a few grammar mistakes as well as typos, it makes your writing confusing to decipher. We don't require a high level of linguistic skills,however, more readability would be appreciated.

- There's no such thing as mana circuits (if that's what you meant by "man circuits") in this setting. Unless that's a very specific characteristic of your character's power it doesn't need to be mentioned.

- That personality section is unnecessary as well. For this RP, we'd prefer to see the characters personalities in action, rather than in their CSs. A matter of "show, don't tell". Using the Sample post to showcase your character's personality would be much more appreciated.

- We prefer if you do IC posts, as well as the Sample, in the 3rd person. 1st person posts are disorienting because of the change in perspective from a character to another as well as giving the false impression that your character was any degree of protagonist status when compared to the other PCs which is rather undesirable.

As soon as you have addressed those issues, the CS will be ready for a second round of evaluations.

Hikari Academy

@Awesomoman64

You can do whatever you feel like. If there was going to have an immediate timeskip, it would have happened already. We are at least giving the chance for people to react.

Winds of Change: A Re:Creators-Inspired Multiverse RP

Nanoha's post is there. I'll get something done for Meteora either later today or tomorrow.

Winds of Change: A Re:Creators-Inspired Multiverse RP

NANOHA TAKAMACHI

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Nanoha couldn't avoid noticing when the monsters that they defeated turned into piles of ash much similar to the ones they found when they first arrived at this location. There was only one logical conclusion that she could come up with, especially since the ash they found was arranged in a pattern that suggested that a previous battle happened here not long ago. Other extradimensional beings must have fought and defeated these monsters here.

However, this conjecture didn't answer two important questions: Who did this and where are the people that should inhabit this area?

Nanoha didn't have much time to think about it before more creatures crept on her, breaking through the walls of nearby buildings. A couple Smash Impacts (i.e.: using Raising Heart as a mana fueled club) later and Nanoha cleared the area around her once more. Right in time for Tenshi to deliver their first solid clue on this investigation.

"Is that what we are supposed to look for? If that's the case, leave it to me," Nanoha said as she took high to skies, stopping once she had a clear sight of the whole operation area. "Raising Heart, please, calculate the target's positions based on the last Area Search," she said as a magic circle appeared below her feet.

"Targets acquired, Master."

"Thank you, Raising Heart."

"Here we go, Accel Shooter: Vanishing Shift..." Nanoha said as several magical bullets appeared in the air around her. Each of them locked on the location of the electronic devices that were emitting the same signals as the mobile phone that Tenshi brought earlier. "Shoot!" she called, unleashing the barrage of homing attacks. Hopefully, this would end this engagement in one fell swoop.

ESCAPE FROM THE NORWOOD MANSION

I'll throw my interest here. Depending on what happens, I'll try to get someone else to join as well.

The War of the Three: Exodus

Bump.

The War of the Three: Exodus

@Lmpkio

Why am I looking at a four pages long NPC CS?