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@Coda: They basically cast from hitpoints, wearing down your vitality for instant casting, meaning too much can kill you way more easily then just burning out your mana.
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@VitaVitaAR Cool! I've actually got a very different spin on the character percolating in my head right now. I'll send a version 2 pitch tomorrow or this weekend.
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Ok, I got a character sheet all up now.





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Finally completed it.



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Let me know if any changes need to be made.

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having two fanciful and ditzy airheads might prove difficult idk
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Okay, bio time~

@Pyromania99 Looks good to me, accepted

@Dark Light There's… quite a bit here that still needs work, starting with the picture; using an official piece of art from something else is strange enough, but it doesn't even fit the notion of a half high-elf. The imp doesn't even have a picture, but you've never asked in detail about demons, so that's probably for the better.

But for the most part? The character concept is just full of ideas that haven't been fully pulled together. Who's his father and does that tie into anything else going on? What was his mother running from? Why did things burn down? Why, when everything was on fire and presumably people are being killed, does he have a "special sword"? I'd also add that a court mage is not a position that's going to be treated like a common servant and replaceable, because it's not something any old person can fill – it wouldn't stop mistreatment, but it wouldn't be "treated like peasant scum" because then you find yourself without a mage. Or on fire.

Abilities and equipment section is really barebones. Why is the sword special? What sort of curses? If he's an enchanter, why doesn't have have anything he's enchanted? It's really odd.

@SilverPaw Couple of things, mostly pretty minor:

Never mind that he had an elder, more competent sister, for tradition dictated heirs be male


Nooooot true in this setting; inheritance is equal, so it would go to the eldest regardless.

The term for a casting implement is a catalyst, but that's just informational. What's really odd about the equipment is… uh, why a machete? Why is his backup a farming implement of all things? It's a bit… odd to have as a "just in case" thing, the deep forest isn't something you really wander into by accident, and it just jars with his whole noble vibe.

Main thing though is whether we could reduce the personality overlap just a bit somehow? Two guys with basically the same personality is a bit uncanny.
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@SilverPaw Couple of things, mostly pretty minor:

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Nooooot true in this setting; inheritance is equal, so it would go to the eldest regardless.

The term for a casting implement is a catalyst, but that's just informational. What's really odd about the equipment is… uh, why a machete? Why is his backup a farming implement of all things? It's a bit… odd to have as a "just in case" thing, the deep forest isn't something you really wander into by accident, and it just jars with his whole noble vibe.

Main thing though is whether we could reduce the personality overlap just a bit somehow? Two guys with basically the same personality is a bit uncanny.


Oh, equal opportunity, nice. And yeah, the equipment section was me being 'what the heck do I put here...hmm...', anyhow altered that and the sister tidbit in the bio.

As for the personity, that depends. I know Calben has a similar vibe, but to me, they're two very distinct characters. Regardless, I trimmed what I felt were the most suspect sentences in the personality section. The whole bio is pretty darn tied into some core traits tho, so if that feels too close...Honestly, at that point I'd need to rework the entire concept, which is far from a minor change.
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Looks good to me, now, at least they're not both focusing on being infinitely absent minded.
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If there's still space, I've been considering joining to. Probably will take a few days to get a sheet though, but thinking of going with a Nem at the moment.
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Three more characters. And Anno's.
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Sooo I might have written an entire character vignette for this new version of Nev. Whether I make the group or not, this was fun to write. XD

Again, I'm still making some setting assumptions, but I think this flows together a bit better.

CW: Animal death. Also the vignette is kinda long.





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@Eisenhorn Out of curiosity, when were you thinking Renard earned his Steel rank? I see an intriguing connection potential if it were around 2 years ago, but I feel it might have been more recent based on the bio.
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@Coda: This looks good to me! Accepted.
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Come back to see only a few spots left. lol. Once I'm done helping a friend move, dropping my sheet tonight. Only got backstory left to finish. Also got a friend making a sheet too.
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@Eisenhorn Out of curiosity, when were you thinking Renard earned his Steel rank? I see an intriguing connection potential if it were around 2 years ago, but I feel it might have been more recent based on the bio.


I had not actually nailed down an exact time frame for each rank, in terms of years in each rank, was kind of leaving it slightly vague for this reason. It is absolutely possible Renard happened to be involved in dealing with the particular group of bandits that captured Eustace, which I would be cool with having be the case.
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I had not actually nailed down an exact time frame for each rank, in terms of years in each rank, was kind of leaving it slightly vague for this reason. It is absolutely possible Renard happened to be involved in dealing with the particular group of bandits that captured Eustace, which I would be cool with having be the case.


Yeah, that's what I was thinking of! Neat, then, if they happen to end up in the same group, Renard will have an admirer :p
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I'm a bit rusty but figured I might try to take a swing at this.

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Yankee shall be presenting my lovely daughter in the morning but, here's your Silver rank.....hopefully. Backstory might not be my best work. Usually don't make extra long backstories but wanted to try for this rp.

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It's true, they're meant to be a matched set, so hopefully it all works.

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