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Went through the background and fleshed out Hann as a person a bit! I hope it's a good edit and shows how Hann had become detached from her own emotions.

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@Xanadu I hope to have the improvements to Sully's sheet in by tomorrow.
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Alright the last application daily update for all of y'all! We are closing in on the finish line and so far we have some really good applications! As all of y'know or I hope that you do tomorrow is our deadline! ^-^ That being said, I will no longer be performing practice reviews at this time. This is because I don't feel with the short time remaining that it will be productive for me or the applicant to have to wait for the review process. Instead that time should be focused on finishing/making the final edits to your sheet. Until then, I hope that all of you congratulate yourself for the job well done so far! If you any last minute questions you can of course shoot me a PM or @ me here in the meantime!
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@Xanadu Thanks for all of the hard work so far! I'm pretty happy with where Ardan is, although I found a really dumb typo that I have to fix. Other than that? Good to go and looking forward to it!
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I'll still have this up before I sleep. Just parts of the bio section left to do, as well as equipment and haunt.
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Hopefully I’ll be able to find more things to refine within the CS, flesh out Hann’s personality a bit more.
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I've left it very late, so I'm playing a game of 'done is better than perfect' and will post when I get the sections fleshed out as much as I can.
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Done is always better then perfect! But don't worry we believe in you!

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@Xanadu fingers crossed this makes the cut

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@Xanadu I took your review to heart and made a lot of additions to Sully's bio. I hope you enjoy reading through it again! Because I really like Sully now.
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I unfortunately have not managed to finish my sheet. I also feel a little disingenuous applying as I have recently dropped an rp due to lack of time on my part, so I'm withdrawing interest.

I hope everyone else has fun with the game!

If there are ever any open spots in the future, I'd love to try again then.
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Bit late with my response due to work and other RL things, but thanks for the kind review! I'm glad you liked him!

What type of unit did he serve in?


Regular infantry. Kopris' father was a very determined man, but not too exceptional of a solider.

My question here would be where did he work then? I'm assuming a high class hospital? And if that's the case how did he get a job there if he had a relatively low position in the social ladder? Merit alone? Did he make friends during his education. etc


Mixture of both. While he was born in the lowest echelons of society, being raised to the higher levels at such a young age allowed him to make friends with higher society, without the same level of sneering that his parents received. Those connections, coupled with his merit, allowed him to get his foot into the door of a high class hospital and provide for his family. Though it wasn't enough to embed him firmly in the hospital and prevent him from being cut.

Why was he shipped of to the SIU? I'm assuming because of his medical experience?


Medical experience,general intelligence, and high scores on tests. I imagine the Hegemony has a test similar to the USA's ASVAB, which indicates aptitude for the military and scoring higher opens the door for better positions.

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I wrote the CS well into 4am several times, and my fingers would wander. I didn't catch this one in my tired stupor. :p It's meant to say 'Hegemony space'.

Why did he get transfered? Was it kind of an all hands on deck situation?


Yes. Order had largely been restored to the Hegemony by this point, and now was the first major strike against the Alliance that they could do. Plus, they were planning on an extended offensive in the Verge against the Alliance, and they wanted to get as many deniable units as they could into there for that purpose.

Was he not allowed to return to his family during this time?


No. The Hegemony felt its resources were spent better in other areas, rather than shipping a soldier quietly back to Kar'Shan only to send him back a few months later.

Can...can.. he make cupcakes?,


Yes.

Why did he replace it with the black one?


Most Batarians will know the significance of the white marble, and begin to question what someone who had sacrificed so much for the Hegemony was doing on random merc jobs in the terminus systems. That would lead inevitably to the revelation of Kopris' desertion and betrayal of his unit, which would only lead to complications that Kopris doesn't want to deal with. Easier to have the black, unassuming, one.

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The conquering hero (both myself and my character) are finally done! True to my word, I got it up before I slept.

Which I will now do. Congrats to everyone who got their sheets in; like I said, they all look great, and I hope we all have a great time playing together.
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Final (small) changes have been made and I thiiiink my girl is done. Fixed her age since I made her older than I intended, changed the image used for her cyber arm (I found a cooler looking one!) and added a smidge about the kitchen.

Also art is hard but I'll get her pic done if it's the death of me.

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Alright, I am sure that I have made the necessary changes to my dude.
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That's completely understandable! Thank you for your active communication throughout and showing of interest! And I will add you to the list of names to call on if spots open up!



In other news...

Applications are officially closed!


I will be with you all shortly to announce the official crew of the Achilles! In the meantime, thank you again everyone for being so cooperative with me during this process and really giving it your all to make your applications the best that they can be! Stay tuned everyone!
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Yeah, I'm gonna have to apologise for being so quiet on my end, I've been super distracted as of late with a lot of thigns and i couldn't wrap up my sheet in time. I wish you all the best of luck with the RP and, well, if there's an opening spot, gimme a call.
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@Xanadu yeah I didnt intend to write them as being a powerhouse. They were a strong gang but not near E, BP or BS. Sorry if my wording made it seem that way. I saw it as because the loot was so good in these bases they raided. They also figured they were too down the ladder for the big 3 to retaliate hard. They were wrong.

I havent been able to get on my laptop since thurs otherwise I wouldve cleared it up. Appreciate the kind words on the sheet :)
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@Star Lord Marius Faro | Human | Engineer
@Rtron Korpis Can'sobar | Batarian | Vanguard
@Dervish Ardan Parvis | Turian | Soldier
@Heat Drayak Vash | Krogan | Soldier
@Monochromatic Rainbow Firuzeh Khoroushi | Human | Vanguard
@Lauder Hann'Ceedda nar Jalazi | Quarian | Infiltrator
@DJAtomika Karmm "Sully" Sol | Krogan | Engineer
@Jarl Coolgruuf Isabel “Bluegrass Bel” Barton | Human | Sentinel
@Plank Sinatra Jackson "Jace" Pulliam | Human | Sentinel


Yep everyone made it! Towards the end, we had a significant drop in applications that ended up making this process a lot more bearable on my end. And in the end all of you guys ended up brining some pretty awesome idea to the table! And even better then that, all of you were responsive and willing to handle the critiques and questioned leveled at you! You all showed that you care and that matters a lot to me. So at the end with only really one player over budget then I originally anticipated bringing us up to a roster of ten, that is a number that I can work with! Congrats to all of you and without further adue lets get to business!

First order of business! Some Important Links!
The Intro Collab

Taking a page from @Dervish's Gm Guide (which has been like super helpful getting this thing off the ground by the way, so thank you for that!) While I'm commencing work on the first real plot-post in earnest, I have a writing exercise for all of you! It's a big collab post between the crew so that we are able to get those first post introductions and other stuff that would usually slow the RP. This collab instead will hopefully give us a chance to have the same established effect, and allow all of us to kind of play with and see how all of our characters will end up getting along with one another! I ended up giving you guys a bit of background info and other stuff to help dress the setting and establish the mood. You can take from that as little or as much as you want from that. But everyone should at least try to contribute something! Because I think it will be a fun thing to work on while I get that big plot post up!


The Discord

Here is the link to the Discord for everyone! Currently it is a little bare bones but when I have some free time I will spruce it up a bit! The discord is intended for planning, off-topic discussion and the like. Official announcements though from the GM will still be posted here though! So keep a watch out for any important messages!


Alright! Let's have a blast everyone! ^-^
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