AlternateMan

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

@Gisk
BY THE HOLY I SHALL SMASH THINE SKULL
I like the concept. We’ve got a tanker, a debuffer, some good damage dealers.

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

Latest version of CS coming right up
WIP2
Reposted since page changed.

TEAM TANK IS UP

Name: Carbo

Age: 47

Gender: male

Appearance:

without armor

with armor

Profession: Shielded Lancer. His mighty shield stands for his allies, and his heavy strike with his halberd keeps the enemy at bay, while him and his comrades march forward. (Shieldbearer)

Level: 1
Exp: 0/12

Weapon:
Rusty halberd: A rusty halberd, thrown into countless battles. Old and damaged, but still useful. (Damage: atk based. Range: 2 cells) +1 ATK
Armor:
Wandering mercenary’s wear: Tough clothing for long time traveling. Might need some washing at some point. +1 SPR
Accessory:
Rusty armor: Rusty metal armor for protection, covering shoulders, chest, and waist. Comes with armored boots too. +1 DEF
-Shield:
Wooden greatshield: An old wooden greatshield. Its size is big enough to intimidate enemies without a fearsome drawing on its front. +1 DEF

A-Ability:

+SHIELD IS UP(requires any GREATSHIELD equipped): Carbo slams down his shield to the ground, pushing away an enemy in front and standing for defense.
120% DEF damage. Range: adjacent cell. 10 MP. Physical damage.
(For the next turn, Carbo is unable to attack and goes into DEFENSE mode. In this state, all attacks directed to any allies adjacent to him will be directed to Carbo, while his DEF and SPR is increased by 20%.)

+Threatening Swing: Carbo swings his halberd widely to fend off enemies.
90% ATK damage. Range: adjacent cell, plus the two cells left and right to it(in Carbo’s point of view). Physical damage.
Enemies hit by the Threatening Swing suffer 10% extra damage to the next attack they receive. 6 MP.

R-Ability:

S-Ability:
-The Towering Protector(works only with any GREATSHIELD):
All attacks except for ones behind deal 10% less damage.
If an attack from such direction deals less damage than 10% of the respective defensive stat(DEF if physical, SPR if magic/INT based), it is ignored and will deal zero damage.
#note: Might need editing depending on GM’s opinion, more over other skills.

B-Ability:

D-Ability:
War Cry: DEFENDER
“FORWARD! WITH NO MERCY!”
With a fearsome warcry, Carbo buffs his teammates.
For the next 3 turns, Carbo and his allies:
Have 50% increased DEF and SPR stats
Will have their first attack after getting buffed deal 130% damage to enemies

Stats:

HP: 25
MP: 15
DD: 0/10
Atk: 4(+1 from Rusty Halberd)
Def: 3(+0 from Wandering Mercenary’s wear) (+1 from rusty armor) (+1 from Wooden Greatshield)
Int: 1 (+0 from Rusty Halberd)
Spr: 2 (+1 from Wooden Greatshield) (+1 from Mercenary’s Wear)
Evade: 1%
Move: 2 (+1 from Shielded Lancer profession)

Skill Points: 0

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

Our team tank is ready to go.
Alright, let’s see.... a bruiser, a bruiser, and possibly a battle mage...

I NEED HEALING.

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

@Leslie Hall This looks fantastic! Party composition is totally up to the players – all I will say is that lacking a magical character will hurt when we fight very physically bulky enemies! It might also be tougher to tank when enemies with high intelligence are attacking if we don't have someone who soaks up magic well. There are a few edits I would like you to make, suggestions I have for you, and other potential changes, but other than that this looks to be in great condition.

Zeke's Changes/Suggestions/Additions

– In general please change all instances of STR to Atk
– For Crushing Blow I would suggest going off a percentage rather than a pure number. This will allow it to scale with enemies. My suggestion would be to make it 10% for three turns with the ability to stack up to three (3) times. If you went with this your MP Cost would be 6 MP.
– For Shoulder Charge I am curious what happens if used in an adjacent cell of an enemy. Does Zeke still go all of his movement stat? Or does he stop as soon as he hits a target? Does his target still only get moved one cell? In what direction? I can cost this once I have more information.
– For Thick Skin I would change to a percentage rather than a pure number so it scales. My suggestion is 15% for now knowing that it can be upgraded later with skill points.
– Explain what 'knocked prone' means for the D-Ability. Also, clarify who is stunned if he collides with terrain during the charge. Other than that, it looks great.
– Please change his stat spread/equipment bonuses to the following:
HP: 25
MP: 20 (+5 from Tear Pendant)
DD: 0/10
Atk: 4 (+1 from Worn Cestus)
Def: 2 (+0 from Fighter's Rags) (+1 from Thick Skin)
Int: 1 (+0 from Worn Cestus)
Spr: 2 (+0 from Fighter's Rags)
Evade: 3%
Move: 2 Cells (+1 from Gladiator Profession)

@AlternateMan Looking so much better. I have a few edits/changes/suggestions/etc for you as well!

Zeke's Changes/Suggestions/Additions

– Under the Accessory category please add 'Shield' as a category to list your shield under.
– SHIELD IS UP in its current state will cost you 22 MP. If you would like to reduce this, I would suggest lowering the buff to your Def/Spr and potentially the covering range. My personal suggestion would be to increase Def and Spr by 20% and cover allies in adjacent cells. This would bring the cost down to a much more manageable 10 MP and you could always upgrade/purchase a stronger defensive skill later.
– Threatening Swing will cost 6 MP.
– Because of the S-Ability know that in battle you will have to denote with each post which direction your character is facing at all times. Up/Down/Left/Right. If you forget I will default to whatever your previous direction was during battle updates.
Just wanted to give you the heads up now so you can change it if you don't want to keep up with it.
– I could use a range on the damage for the D-Ability. Also, are the enemies hit taking 130% damage each turn or just once?
What stat is being used to calculate this damage?
– Please change his stat spread/equipment bonuses to the following:
HP: 25
MP: 15
DD: 0/10
Atk: 4 (+1 from Rusty Halberd)
Def: 3 (+0 from Mercenary's Wear) (+1 from Rusty Armor) (+1 from Wooden Greatshield)
Int: 1 (+0 from Rusty Halberd)
Spr: 2 (+1 from Mercenary's Wear) (+0 from Wooden Greatshield)
Evade: 1%
Move: 2 Cells (+1 from Shielded Lancer Profession)

@Renval

Nerfed SHIELD IS UP so Carbo can actually use it at level 1.
Threatening Swing has MP cost.

For D-ability,
First attacks allies(including Carbo himself) do after getting buffed will deal 130% damage.
Ex: Rio uses Claw on AlternateMan( 10 hp, 0 mp, 1 atk, 1def, 1 int, 1 spr): 4atk x q.q=r.r -> 4
4 atk - 1 def = 3
The final output x 1.3
Which, in this case, will be a 3.9. That could be.... 4...?
The respective stats(if ally uses magic then int, if physical then atk) would be used, of course.

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

WIP2
Reposted since page changed.

TEAM TANK IS UP

Name: Carbo

Age: 47

Gender: male

Appearance:

without armor

with armor

Profession: Shielded Lancer. His mighty shield stands for his allies, and his heavy strike with his halberd keeps the enemy at bay, while him and his comrades march forward. (Shieldbearer)

Level: 1
Exp: 0/12

Weapon:
Rusty halberd: A rusty halberd, thrown into countless battles. Old and damaged, but still useful. (Damage: atk based. Range: 2 cells) +1 ATK
Armor:
Wandering mercenary’s wear: Tough clothing for long time traveling. Might need some washing at some point. +1 SPR
Accessory:
Rusty armor: Rusty metal armor for protection, covering shoulders, chest, and waist. Comes with armored boots too. +1 DEF
-Shield:
Wooden greatshield: An old wooden greatshield. Its size is big enough to intimidate enemies without a fearsome drawing on its front. +1 DEF

A-Ability:

+SHIELD IS UP(requires any GREATSHIELD equipped): Carbo slams down his shield to the ground, pushing away an enemy in front and standing for defense.
120% DEF damage. Range: adjacent cell. 10 MP. Physical damage.
(For the next turn, Carbo is unable to attack and goes into DEFENSE mode. In this state, all attacks directed to any allies adjacent to him will be directed to Carbo, while his DEF and SPR is increased by 20%.)

+Threatening Swing: Carbo swings his halberd widely to fend off enemies.
90% ATK damage. Range: adjacent cell, plus the two cells left and right to it(in Carbo’s point of view). Physical damage.
Enemies hit by the Threatening Swing suffer 10% extra damage to the next attack they receive. 6 MP.

R-Ability:

S-Ability:
-The Towering Protector(works only with any GREATSHIELD):
All attacks except for ones behind deal 10% less damage.
If an attack from such direction deals less damage than 10% of the respective defensive stat(DEF if physical, SPR if magic/INT based), it is ignored and will deal zero damage.
#note: Might need editing depending on GM’s opinion, more over other skills.

B-Ability:

D-Ability:
War Cry: DEFENDER
“FORWARD! WITH NO MERCY!”
With a fearsome warcry, Carbo buffs his teammates.
For the next 3 turns, Carbo and his allies:
Have 50% increased DEF and SPR stats
Will have their first attack after getting buffed deal 130% damage to enemies

Stats:

HP: 25
MP: 15
DD: 0/10
Atk: 4(+1 from Rusty Halberd)
Def: 3(+0 from Wandering Mercenary’s wear) (+1 from rusty armor) (+1 from Wooden Greatshield)
Int: 1 (+0 from Rusty Halberd)
Spr: 2 (+1 from Wooden Greatshield) (+1 from Mercenary’s Wear)
Evade: 1%
Move: 2 (+1 from Shielded Lancer profession)

Skill Points: 0

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

@AlternateMan The D-Ability needs to be dampened. There's way too much going on, even for an ultimate ability. Everything else looks good though. Don't forget to list what your Accessory boosts!

@Renval

Fixed D-Ability, added rusty armor def stat. Added boosted ststs behind weapon/clothing/armor flavor texts.

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

@Renval another edit up

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

Edited, take a look.
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I gotta think a bit more for his D ability..
Most definitely a buff, but gotta think of it.

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

WIP

TEAM TANK IS UP

Name: Carbo

Age: 47

Gender: male

Appearance:

without armor

with armor

Profession: Shielded Lancer. His mighty shield stands for his allies, and his heavy strike with his halberd keeps the enemy at bay, while him and his comrades march forward. (Shieldbearer)

Level: 1
Exp: 0/12

Weapon:
Rusty halberd: A rusty halberd, thrown into countless battles. Old and damaged, but still useful. (Damage: atk based. Range: 2 cells) +1 ATK
Armor:
Wandering mercenary’s wear: Tough clothing for long time traveling. Might need some washing at some point. +1 DEF
Accessory:
Rusty armor: Rusty metal armor for protection, covering shoulders, chest, and waist. Comes with armored boots too. +1 DEF
Wooden greatshield: An old wooden greatshield. Its size is big enough to intimidate enemies without a fearsome drawing on its front. +1 DEF, +1 SPR

A-Ability:

+SHIELD IS UP(requires any GREATSHIELD equipped): Carbo slams down his shield to the ground, pushing away an enemy in front and standing for defense.
120% DEF damage. Range: adjacent cell. 10 MP. Physical damage.
(For the next turn, Carbo is unable to attack and goes into DEFENSE mode. In this state, all attacks directed to any allies behind Carbo and within 2 cells from him will be directed to Carbo, while his DEF and SPR is increased by 100%.)

+Threatening Swing: Carbo swings his halberd widely to fend off enemies.
90% ATK damage. Range: adjacent cell, plus the two cells left and right to it(in Carbo’s point of view). 5 MP. Physical damage.
Enemies hit by the Threatening Swing suffer 10% extra damage to the next attack they recieve.

R-Ability:

S-Ability:
-The Towering Protector(works only with any GREATSHIELD):
All attacks except for ones behind deal 10% less damage.
If an attack from such direction deals less damage than 10% of the respective defensive stat(DEF if physical, SPR if magic/INT based), it is ignored and will deal zero damage.
#note: Might need editing depending on GM’s opinion, more over other skills.

B-Ability:

D-Ability:
War Cry: DEFENDER
“FORWARD! WITH NO MERCY!”
With a fearsome warcry, Carbo buffs his teammates.
For the next 3 turns, Carbo and his allies:
Have 100% increased DEF and SPR stats
Deal 150% damage

Stats:

HP:
MP:
DD:
Atk: (+1 from Rusty Halberd)
Def: (+1 from Wandering Mercenary’s wear) (+1 from rusty armor) (+1 from Wooden Greatshield)
Int:
Spr: (+1 from Wooden Greatshield)
Evade:
Move:

Skill Points: 0

Ellon Chronicles: Dreams on the Horizon

Guys, I need your opinions, I’m considering two concepts.
1. Dude with a greatshield and spear
Gonna be an awesome tanker with awesome muscles. Skills would be based on defending allies.

2. Dude with a giant mounted crossbow
“SIEGE CROSSBOW! MOUNTED AND LOADED!”
Glass cannon with long range attacks, skills based on wiping dangerous targets off the battlefield with devastating damage.
And meme-based quotes.