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Back when dinosaurs ruled the Earth, I got started with writing online on the Spore forums. Man, those were the days. We're talking like 12 years ago 2010-ish!

I've been here on and off for almost as long, and have GM'd a bunch of different things to varying success.

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@Antarctic Termite

I took the liberty of assuming that Maize continued to follow Slough and party. Do you intend to respond to this part of my recent post, or can I just assume that Maize went with Ventus and that Jvan didn't see fit to talk after they landed by the river mouth?

If you want to respond then no rush; I'm just wondering whether Ventus can go home yet or if there's still a need for him to stay down on Galbar.

...At the last moment the storm swerved towards the fibreling, though unless Maize jumped headlong into the grasp of those turbulent winds, she would not be enveloped quite enough for Ventus to sweep her into the air whilst he moved at such a pace. She would be left to fend for herself against the horrors of that jungle if she did not Maize chose to put faith in the djinni lord...

True to his promise, Ventus had done as Jvan asked so soon as time allowed him. Perhaps she would see fit reward him still or perhaps she would not, but in the end it mattered not. Ventus would work with whatever tools he had to see to grand completion the tasks set before him: the glory and delight in eventual success was reward enough in its own right. Such was his nature...
Excerpts of the last collab
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We can conclude from this analysis that as Vulamera's love decreases, Zephyrion's approval goes up exponentially and the chance of you being an asshole is proportional.

@The Irish Tree

Liking what I see; you have a unique idea and a good sheet. I do recommend a change of domain, though. Doorways is essentially the same thing as Portals, and what other portfolios would you be able to eventually add to such a narrow domain anyways? Consider something like Magic or Space as domain, because those concepts seem to be suitable for Portals while being far less restrictive.

@poog the pig Methinks a certain demigod needs to be taught his place in the Natural Order before he rules anything. That, or many more discipline lessons.


I can see said demigod taking after Zephyrion to become a narcissistic absolutist, but I can just as easily see him being broken and learning humility. Either development would be interesting. Some food for thought when we go through their interactions in the collab, poog
@Legion02

As of now the djinn are a chaotic, disorganized rabble that do little except claim land and engage in petty turf wars. I hoped to imply as much with Torrid in that last collab, but this should become pretty clear after I get around to writing my Slough week post.
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You can try conquer school? GRAB YER BLUDGEONS AND FREE THY SELF!!!

Also, I just realized, no way in hell will the Pronobii allow themselves to be conquered. In fact, all races banding together for prosperity and peace is something Reathos would fear. Oh that's gonna be interesting. Guys, we found our Troy!!! The gods and species that make up the Empire of Lifprasil VS those who are against it!


...VS whatever abominable horrors Zephyrion, Vestec, and Mammon decide to unleash upon the world!

Can you hear them? Can you smell them? The ogres are coming soon.
@Kho

By the way, I'm hungry for some Khookies from that last collab.
@Rtron

Elementals were persuaded to join that horde of chaos? And they're storm djinn? Those already exist, and they're just the elementals who control weather. We'd better watch out guys, because Grot is the new guy in town and now he can make it rain!

Nah, in all seriousness they'd be more like this guy from the creation sheet on elementals. I haven't made elementalism yet so there's no way mortals could fight or command beings like that yet, but since it seems to have Vestec who personally went around enslaving creatures I'll go along with djinn making up a part of Grot's army.

I too still want to make a Slough day contribution. Have planned out what the post will be and everything; just need to actually write it. But up next I also nominate Jvan, and since that seems to have a lot of support I think we'll go with that.
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I thought they were pretty solid books, all things considered.


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Dragon-slaying, BAH HUMBUG!

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Mind if I ask your issues with the series?


I'm inclined to agree with Dawnscroll, because, um...


To balance out that rant with some rare positivism, I really liked the Urgals. Everything about the Urgals as a race and their contribution to the story was compelling, but beyond that the only characters I really liked were the old elf and his similarly decrepit dragon. Can't even remember their names though, it's been a while :/

Throughout much of the books I thought the story was mediocre to good, but at the end I kind of had an epiphany in which I realized all of those things I just listed, and in reflection I kind of tore the series to shreds in my mind for a day or two before concluding that it was overrated.
For some reason tons of people have been asking about the most recent map lately, so I updated that character section post to include the new(ish) draft.

It still lacks some of the newest additions to the map, but with spring break I may actually have time to make a good map. (Nobody remind me of how many times I've already said that I'll finally make the map! )

I am being uselss. Can't find any sort of map, outdated or otherwise.

Also, equally useless. Can Demi-Gods use Might to increase their own level?


The map they reference is on page one of the character section, one of the topmost posts. Can't miss the two giant pictures that I didn't feel like putting into a hider

Quickly, Kabeen; you must read the gigantic OP! The answers to that question and many more are in that behemoth, and if Kho comes on and finds out that you didn't readt he OP he'll murder you!

To answer your question demigods can use Might to level and indeed this is the only way, barring unusual plot things that happen IC, like a god directly empowering a demigod for some reason.

Name: Legio

Alias: Legio uses the name 'Ine' when among others, much to Spitfire's chagrin.

Gender: Physically female, mentally, both.

Domain (Portfolio): Fire (Lava)

Domain (Portfolio) Description: Fire! It's hot. Used to kill things that are scary, like spiders. Lava, is also hot, but killing spiders with lava is a touch of overkill. Mostly Volcano Blood, Lava is actually really good fertilizer, since it does buggerations and then you can grow stuff really well.

Alignment: Neutral.

Personality: Legio has several Perosnalities, as she has several people inside her head. Most where condenced into a single being, but a few were to powerful to be subded, and so they share. Sharing with two is easier than sharing with two hundred, after all.

Spitfire, the self-proclaimed 'King of Fire' is a very proud, slightly narracistic man who loves to show off his powers, is generally extremely high-key, and loves attetion. He is slightly embarrased about the form of his host however, and so he doesn't speak often, since his glorious, powerful voice does not carry right in the womanly vocal cords. He helps people, when he believes they need help, but does not dominat another person, only helping when he believes the person's life is at risk, and instead allowing them to work out their own problems, to build character.

The other inhabitant, Ine, who calls herself the 'Mistress of Magma' is a lot more subdued, but speaks outwardly more often, feeling naturally at home within the female form. She is more active in her desires to help people, which can sometimes sometimes cause her and Spitfire to argue, while the host stands there and stares off into nothing. While possessing a firey temper and ability to be quite destructive, she prefers to use her Magma's ability to fertalize, by spawning it, and then rapidly cooling it, and allowing it to dissolve in a matter of minutes, rather than hours or days.

Both, however, agree that the world is beautiful, and interesting, and are equally eager to see all it has to offer.

Appearance:


Legio uses a hood most of the time to cover her intense crimson eyes, but occasionally throws it back when she wants to show off, or shock people into listening to her. In time of great concentration, or great distraction, her clothes seem to flicker like a flame would, betraying their nature and origin.
Musical Theme: youtube.com/watch?v=cRmwFBK0cyk

Description: A mortal attempt to touch the divine, Ine is a result of several hundred beings combining their essence into one, making a spirit soup in which great power was beheld. Unfortunately, they quickly realized that they where all still concious, coherent, and in control. Like four people trying to drive the same cart, it did not go over well, and so a fight brought out in the Mindscape of what was now Legio, over complete, totally control. Time, as a concept, was distorted in the Mindscape, but eventually most were laid low, and it ended in a stalemate between Spitfire, and Ine. The two tried to clash with each other, but realized they were far to equally matched, so begrudgingly stood together, not total domination as was expected, but much more than sharing with several hundred others.

Ine, had rather sneakily created the host while the others fought, so Spitfire was stuck within a female body, which brought about his ire, but he could do nothing, as previously proved, so he simply seethed, and grumbled. Eventually, they got around to, working together to a degree, to test out the new powers and explore the world in a way they never could previously.

Concealment Level: 1 (I believe)
Detection Level: 1 (I believe)


I won't unilaterally approve a character sheet; we'll have to see what @Rtron and @Kho think. But in the meantime, I'll share my thoughts.

You seem to have laid a solid foundation down. I can see the resemblance to Emily, and while keeping the general theme of fire-king inside of a girl's mind to create a pyromancer is good, certain details don't fit the setting of this RP. Specifically, what would Spitfire actually have been in the context this RP prior to becoming part of Legios? One of the really powerful fire elementals created by Zephyrion, perhaps? A demon made by Mammon? We'll have to iron out details like this.

Also keep in mind that humans are currently not numerous and have only just been given fire. No mortals currently wield magic with which they could try this, "Ine is a result of several hundred beings combining their essence into one, making a spirit soup in which great power was beheld." For those reasons most of what went into your description would probably have to be reworked. Honestly I think it'll be for the better though; instead of simply telling us all this stuff about Legios' creation, you could actually show us by having it be your first post.

Beyond that, if you're looking to make enhancements you could elaborate on her alignment and go into more detail about her powers/Domain (Portfolio).

I'm scared. Between the huge IC posts, and the already indepth lore of this RP, I feel I would suck balls at it.


The others have already offered words of encouragement, and I agree with them. You could do this; it isn't out of reach, and joining RPs like this is precisely how you can get better at writing.

That being said, make no mistake that the standard of writing and general expectations here are definitely a cut above that of Dungeon Keepers and Horde of Evil. It will be a jump up, but as I said before, I think you have what it takes to do this. Just be aware that this will take more effort (and time, considering the size and pace of this RP) before making a commitment.

I hope that none of my critique on your sheet or the word on this RP's standards came across as condescending or abrasive; I'm glad to see you here Kabeen. I was just trying to be frank in the interest of helping you out as much as I can, so don't get overwhelmed. Yet.

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@Vec
Consider making them a peaceful, agrarian society
@Fabulous Knight

Normally I'd be inclined to agree that it's at least two or three Might, but there's a loophole. I assume that there are only a small number of these beings that will be the progenitors for the entire race, so if Mammon moves quickly he could spend one Might affect them all with a censure that would be passed down. That seems like a crafty thing to do, fitting for Mammon and appropriate seeing as it'd be silly to most likely spend more Might adding a curse than making the entire race in the first place had cost Vulamera.

1 Might: Censure or praise. This is very similar to the above miracle, but it is applied to individuals or small groups of people and are far more severe. For instance, one who is censured may turn into a stone or find themselves with green skin and snakes for hair, while one who is praised may be summoned back from the dead or in other ways blessed.
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