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Can't say I have much of a reputation on the site, having just joined, but I'd like to jump in if you're open to the unproven types
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We may have some interest, though we need to read up more and ponder concepts before we can be sure.
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Sounds like an interesting roleplay. Mind if I throw in a character to see if you like him?


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Thanks all for the sheets!

As I'm in Australia I'll be checking these tomorrow after work which I think for 'Muricans will be the morning of the 6th.

I was hoping to get the first post up today but I'll leave it for when I go through the sheets and we'll start the roleplay! WOOHOOOOOOOO
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Two paragraphs of the history allude to mature content, so I put them in another hider (Edit: it's about four paragraphs now)

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Hey all!

This is your 12 hour reminder! You have 12 hours to finish up your sheets and get them finished for my check! I'm looking forward to reading them all - if you arent accepted this time for any reason the door will always be open for you later down the track!
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Since the Dark Side seems to need a little boost and the initial Dev build doesn't seem to be needed for those boys, here's Dev Version 2: Electric Boogaloo.

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Well, my sheet is finally done! Sorry if the personality and appearance section bits are, well, a bit subpar, I've always struggled with writing those but hopefully they aren't too bad.


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Apologies that my own sheets are very... basic. I've been working on a lot of stuff for this RP, would like to update and expand eventually, mine will be very passive characters eventually though so I can take more of a guiding GM role!
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No worries. It is far better for you to focus on providing a good plot for us players to derail enjoy.

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I have made my decisions.

Selection and Reviews will be going up shortly. Upon selection, I will also be sending everyone a 'Secret', privately, that links you to the disappearance of Jedi Master Lako'nas. Whether you wish to divulge it to the rest of the rp'ers is up to you :wink: it is also entirely up to you whether you want to divulge anything IC....
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You made it friend!

What can I say? I love everything about this character, and you write so damn good always. This roleplay needs you and you morally questionable character! I don't know how you always just manage to make a character come so much to life - from describing his personality, his history - to going to the level to describe the shades of clothing that he wears. Everything you write is so delightful and I can't wait to put you to action in this rp!
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Everybody say WOORAH SHA.

Everytime I read it, I have been saying it like a chant. Personality dives off the page and smacks you in the face you are a king of detail and excellence in quirky writing my friend. I really also love that you add so much of yourself. I dunno, I feel like getting to know you and see your fun side recently definitely shows in the way you write your characters. You have a very distinctive and enjoyable style yet you always bring something new to the table and make it unique. This character is fantastic and we're in need of this kind of flavour in the rp.

I really enjoyed the backstory, how I was set up to think that Woo's sister was left behind and in trouble after she had left - so to see that flipped on it's head was really interesting. I imagine that she has a lot of baggage, and I think she will mesh really well in a way with my own Twi'lek Jedi character!

You're in!
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I ought to fix her bio a bit, but at the moment she seems workable. Going to add equipment and class in a hot second.


I really like this character a lot, and see so many similarities between Talija and Kos'nora. I love that she is younger than Kos and yet is a Knight. I think the two will learn a lot from each other. There is a really nice tone to the writing that you do that I always love, and like others in this RP your style is very distinctive and your writers voice is clear. I like that she is very focused, for a younger character too, you have given a clear and believable history that fleshes her out just enough to hook me, but leaves me really excited for her development throughout the RP. Happy to report you're in! Post in the CS tab! :)
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Man. This girl is going to wind up everyone, isn't she? Hot headed young female? Yep. Count me in! Mostly I'm looking forward to seeing how she holds her own against grumpy Quanades. They will bring out the worst in each other! MWAHAHAHA! I'm also quite excited to see how the other chosen characters will react - especially Zekha. There is much of a potential kindred spirit there and I can't pass it up. I love the part about how she was assigned a Master to try and calm her temper, and that you've written about the trial. I really didn't know where that was going to go but I'm glad at how it turned out - to be a test!

One thing I would like to offer as feedback is to explore other facets of her personality as well as her main and prominent ons (hot headed, emotional). I would love to see her on a journey of vulnerability and to see the softer side come through as well to give her some more dimension as the roleplay progresses! Congrats and post the sheet in the CS tab! :)
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Hopefully the "race" I decided to go with is fine.



Okay, so this is definitely the sheet I've really struggled with the most on whether to accept it. You've created a character that is really different to the rest that have been written up. I really like the idea of Rusty, but I'm finding at the moment that he isn't as well developed in the CS as I'd like. What is his allegiance? Where was Kell's loyalty? The droid is currently just a bit ambiguous and there, and is bordering on novelty. There is a lot to love in this sheet though, in particular this bit got to me;

"Now 4 years later, R5 has become a decent smuggler and engineer in its own right, and although it doesn't know it yet, the inhibitors have slowly begun their process of shutting down."

I'm going with my gut on this one, and I will accept you into the RP on the condition that you just add a little more to the sheet, flesh out that backstory a bit more, get some more of that emotion in there, and give me some more clarity on some of the things too. You mention for example that he uses words that convey no emotion, yet is a smooth talker? I'd like to see the sheet re-worked a little bit and some more development before you can post in the CS tab. I hope you're still interested and up to the challenge!
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Great sheet! I really get a sense of this character from what you've written. I do have one or two things to pick at. Maybe remove that she is a Jedi Consular as she has had no formal training. I prefer the idea of her being this big old hippie Wookie lady with a staff healing people as a force sensitive! I love that in a universe like Star Wars she has got no idea of technology! I think this will add a great point of difference within the roleplay. She is definitely going to be the granny of the ship, and in the cast of characters we have - we definitely need that old soul warmth.

Also this bit reminds me of that one scene from Blackfish ;_;
"Her people's homes were ransacked and empty. At night, she did not have Wrrl'arra's hands around her, and she could hear, when she closed her eyes - the cries of her daughter, distantly, echoing as if from across the galaxy."

Now a question for myself... what the hell does this Wookie know about a missing Jedi Knight and his Padawan... hahaha.

You're in! I'd maybe go through and tone down some of the Sith fighting, it seems almost a bit much, with snapping lightsabers etc. Maybe take that out and then post up your CS! :)
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Flipping hell. Talk about making a nasty character really damn believable and great to read. Great sheet dude, and I'm so glad to read such a great 'Dark Side' sheet after all of those sissy Goody sheets... I kid, I kid.... ;) There is SOOO much to unpack here. I'm so glad you got this finished in time. I absolutely want your character in this RP. His perspective is fascinating, his motives, his backstory. Just brilliant stuff :) Similarly to some advice I have already given, is don't be afraid to show his other colours - if he has any warmth, any 'good' emotions, to round him out and make him even more fascinating to watch and enjoyable to hate! I'm really excited to see a naughty bounty hunter and I think he'll add an edge to this RP I was hoping we would have. Post up the CS as is! :)
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