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Chronicles of Atlas | Medieval Pokemon

Alrighty, here we go with the critiques. Be aware that, even though I am looking over your sheets, there might be one or two things that stick out and would like emphasized/changed/explained more. I hope you don't come at me with pitchforks and torches.

@jdh97 Honestly, I don't see anything wrong with Eon other than the clothes he wears. Taranis is pretty hot, so maybe he could ditch the furs? Unless you're saying that's what he's wearing up in Sher. Also, you can explain what he carries under the "equipment" section that's beneath "weapons" instead of putting everything under other. Other than that, your character is ACCEPTED.

@Mr Nim The first thing that sticks out to me is that, even though Zella was born in Hotaru, she has no eastern vibes. Her name isn't really Eastern, and she seems like she isn't really from there. You can easily fix this by either having her parents not be Hotaruan, and have moved there instead, or have her be from somewhere else.

@Typical Honestly, I love him. I don't see anything that really sticks out, so he's ACCEPTED.

@CleanBreeze I am not looking at your character until you join the discord, fix your backstory, and separate your paragraph into separate ones.

@Eleven Firstly, I love the format you have your sheet in. Love the blocks and sprites! Honestly, love her simple and straightforward backstory, and I love the story with Captain. She's ACCEPTED.

@Hey Im Jordan Well, nothing much other than to say ACCEPTED!

@Fabricant451 Since your character's backstory is interlinked with Westra's, I don't have a problem with it either. ACCEPTED!

@UndeadSpartan I don't really have an issue with Shareena either. But, something that does nag me is the fact that she named her Croagunk and not her Zoroark, which has been with her for longer. If you need me to help you to come up with a name for him, I will! But for now, she's ACCEPTED!

@Demon Shinobi Your character sucks and you should feel bad.

NAH JUST KIDDING!

His weaponry is accepted, especially since we discussed it before. They're pretty cool-- simple, yet intricate, weapons. His personality and backstory is good, too, albeit a bit short. But I'm not gonna haggle you for it, it's good enough for me. If you would like I could help you pick out movesets later. For now, he's ACCEPTED!

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@dragonpiece @FailingForward I'm sorry to say you've been booted from the roleplay and will not have a chance of rejoining.

@Helios J Mears @Pirouette I'm giving you two until the end of the weekend to at least reply to my pings. If you don't reply by Sunday, I'll unfortunately have to boot you two as well.

I'll be trying my damn hardest to start this roleplay today.

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@Calle I'm sorry but I'm only looking for jojo atm.

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Craving Jojo!

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@dragonpiece Sorry, going to have to boot you.

@FailingForward I'll wait one more day for your reply. If not, going to have to boot you as well. Sorry!

RESET! A Hitman Reborn

Cafe Dumonte
_{Somewhere in Switzerland}
August 12th, Present day, Afternoon
_{Interacting with: Yoshi (@Demon Shinobi), Caterina [(@Raijinslayer)], Renato (@Grey)}

Caterina's voice had disturbed him somewhat, putting Cyril in a somewhat more bitter mood than before. But Renato's voice only shocked him out of his doze. Yes, he had noticed the strange people approaching to his left. But his partner's scream only made him jolt in his place. Well that was unexpected. Those guys must have thought so, too, cause they bolted in the other direction. Something else that was unexpected was Yoshi's reaction to all of this. Which was, of course was to literally throw them in the direction of the fleeing enemies. His heart nearly stopped as he flew through the air, fearful that he would collide with the enemy or fall straight on his face. But, luckily enough for him, he landed on his feet-- not without stumbling a few feet forward, of course.

"F-!" Cyril began to say, but then he realized he didn't have time to curse or huff at Yoshi's decision-making. Gritting his teeth together, he pulled a crimson-colored box from his belt before slamming his ring into it. In a burst of vermilion flame, his Box Weapon came to form. The kusarigama. It was strange to even hold in his hands. It was bulky, clunky, and it didn't even feel right to hold. Nevertheless, he swung the chain above his head a couple of times, trying to gather momentum. After a few quick moments, he released it, and it lashed out towards one of the enemies' legs. The chain and blade wrapped around the limb, digging into his flesh. The man screamed, fell to the floor, and slid forward with the sicking sound of skin and cloth scraping against cement. The other two swung around him, weapons at the ready. Oh, boy. This was going to be quite fun.

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Sorry for triple post, but messed up with a ping. @FailingForward

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Also, @dragonpiece and [@FallingForward], this is your last warning. I pinged and PMed you several times to join the discord or at the very least let me know that you were still interested. If you don't reply within the next day, I'll assume you don't want go join anymore.

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@Pirouette I PM'd it to you, but I'll PM it again~

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@CleanBreeze Hey! I'm not looking at sheets right now, but skimming over your sheet, I noticed that you haven't really given me a bio. It just seems like you wrote a story. I'll give you the chance to fix it, though.

Also, press enter two times between lines of dialogue and use paragraphs. It makes it easier to read.

Chronicles of Atlas | Medieval Pokemon

Umeda Jiro

"This blade never gets any lighter."

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Name:
Umeda Jiro

Age:
Twenty-five

Gender:
Male

Country of Origin:
Yine

Weapons:
- Daisho. Two blades that symbolize his position of samurai-- the katana and the ko-wakizashi. Each of their hilts are emblazoned with the silver pattern of the Umeda. Jiro doesn't actively use these weapons, only carrying them around at his waist when he's traveling abroad.

- Tachi. The sword which Jiro usually uses. It is a rather plain, double-edged blade.

- Tanto. A small dagger that Jiro has on him at all times.

Equipment:
- Satchel. A medium-sized cloth satchel that contains provisions for both him and his Pokemon. This includes dried meats and a variety of berries. It also contains a few pieces of parchment, a well of ink, and a quill. The satchel also contains small portions of gauze, bandages, along with a needle and thread.

- Coinpurse. A very small purse that he keeps hidden on him.

Appearance Information

Hair Color:
Black

Eye Color:
Mint

Height:
5'10

Weight:
153 lbs

Complexion:
Light

Body Composition:
Lean

Choice of Clothing:
For the time being, Jiro's bears rather light armor. His helm obscures his features, but does not block his vision. He is usually always seen armored, and with his visor down, at that. When he is not suited for combat, he wears his silver samurai's obi as seen in the picture above.

Personality:
Jiro is as cold as the northern rains and sea. Due to his aloof nature, civilians prefer to keep him at arm's length. He does not reveal much about his past, often sticking to the same old story of him being a traveling sellsword that wishes to make a name for himself. He keeps his voice at a low level and speaks rather plainly. He has some difficulty interacting with people in a intimate level, such as having private conversations. During these times, he has difficulty finding words, leading to him sometimes stumbling over his sentences. When one gets to know Jiro, they find that he is a rather polite individual who tries to keep his temper from boiling over; despite his seemingly placid attitude, Jiro has a great dislike for arrogance and injustice, and will no doubt speak his mind when instigated.

Short Biography:
The third son of one of Yine's most famous samurai, Umeda Hayato, Jiro always had an eye for adventure. His brothers were raised and trained to become samurai and perhaps even shoguns in the long run, which meant that Jiro was expected to follow their footsteps. He dreamt of bringing even more honor the the family name and help provide a more comfortable lifestyle for his mother, who was constantly ill. At the age of ten, Jiro began to train under his father's supervision. He not only learned how to fend off an enemy with his sword and the help of his Vulpix, but also started to adapt to the lifestyle of bushido.

Jiro was eighteen when he enlisted in Yine's army. However, since the war took place three years ago, the country was in a state of quiet. There were no foreign enemies to fight, so he was told to either help patrol the borders or take up odd jobs on the behest of the army. He quickly proved that he was one of the best men in the army's ranks, not because of his strength and skill, but because of his loyalty, honor, compassion, and devoutness. At the age of twenty-four, he was invited by the emperor to be one of his champions in the Firebrand Tourney. With the help of his Ninetales and Skarmory, he was able to defeat many of the other competitors. Jiro was only bested at the last battle of the tourney, and even then, it was quite the close battle. Upon returning home, Jiro was promoted to samurai, due to the fact that he upheld honor and courage even in the face of defeat.

Unfortunately for Jiro, his glory and fame was short-lived. One day, while patrolling the streets of his hometown, he came across a thief that was stealing from a local fish store. He unsheathed his weapon, telling the thief to stand down. The thief did not comply. Instead, he withdrew a dagger and aimed to pierce Jiro's neck or chest. Seeing that the thief was going for a fatal blow, he quickly cut him down. Yet, the shop owner had not even seen the thief steal his stock, and everyone else was so caught off guard by Jiro's attack, that they thought he had lost his mind and slaughtered a man in broad daylight. Before the city guard could apprehend him, Jiro fled the town. During the night, when everyone was sleeping, he slipped back into his home and packed everything he could. Since his departure from his home, Jiro maintains the facade of a traveling sellsword that has no origin.

Pokemon:

Pokemon #1

Name:
Kaneki

Species:
Skarmory

Gender:
Male

Ability:
Keen Eye

Appearance:
Kaneki's steely feathers are white instead of gray.

Personality:
Nosy, quick-witted, greedy, selfish, cocky.

Move Set:
- Metal Claw
- Steel Wing
- Swift
- Thief

Pokemon #2

Name:
Shuhei

Species:
Northern Ninetales

Gender:
Male

Ability:
Snow Cloak

Appearance:
Shuhei seems to be a little lighter blue than most northern Ninetales; he has an almost silvery sheen to his fur.

Personality:
Observant, quiet, adventurous, calm.

Move Set:
- Moonblast
- Ice Beam
- Blizzard
- Extrasensory

Summary:
A ronin who seeks to redeem himself through glory at the Firebrand Tourney.

Other:
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