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The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@RomanAria Ouch. Alright. Thank you for the update.

Pokémon: Start

Alright... Info gathered, majority of post written, but this week has been taxing, and my week-end has been booked. I'm going to attempt getting it through tomorrow (Saturday), but I cannot promise that. If so, Monday, at the very latest.

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@Terminal Is everything alright? Do you need assistance in any way?

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@shylarah

Sharing my location

Well. If you want to know, then yes. I can share that. I'm Swedish. The vast majority of my learning English was through video games and movies, in addition to that my mother read books to me in the language. I remember at my first ever English-lesson, I was already partly fluent in the language. Though, it's highly likely that I simply got the pronunciation of "y" wrong in some words, as it wasn't my native language. Some mistakes are to be expected.

It feels so strange, though. I looked up specific scenes where I knew people said the word "reality". Listening to them say it, they actually said "realitee". But, in my memory, both BEFORE and AFTER listening again, I still hear "reality". I just can't remember them saying "realitee" unless I am specifically listening for it, not even in my memories. Oh, well.

Response to feedback

Teh-heh. I'm happy to hear you enjoyed the story. I enjoyed writing it. Somehow, I really like that world, enough that it's now one of few I've written two entries in. Yupp, your points have been noted. I wanted Charity to feel some real despair, so I kind of needed her pillar of trust to be a... haha. And yes, the ending... well... was kind of needed to connect that she's the same person that's in... hahaha... but I found that it was very fitting with the labour. I imagined I could make it a nice little twist. Looks like it went well, with at least one reader. Thank you~

If you do wish to read Apocalypse Maiden (and haven't found it before now), a quick search through the victory archives should do. Only if you really want to, of course, it's a comparatively long read. I would also like to point out that not everything might connect perfectly between the entries, some things went just... slightly off from my thinking, as the two entries were developed very independently. But, yes. Anyways. That's all. Haha.

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@Delta44 Alright! Nicely posted!

@Lasrever@Pikmin Eye@Eklispe I can summarize the battle using the information provided if that's the consensus. Or if anyone want to post specific tactics I can go for that, too, but yes. It's high time for me to post again.

@Pirouette ... Are you still here?

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

Oh, my. I must say I'm fairly curious on what's going on in that discussion. In any case. Take your time.

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@Pyromaniacwolf Nicely posted!

@Delta44 And yupp, I can completely understand that. I just want those little updates. Hahaha. And yes, the test completely takes priority. Good luck with it! We'll wait until after it!

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@Pyromaniacwolf Alright. If you want to discuss it, why you're unsure why to post, then there's an OOC here. Yupp.

Pokémon: Start

@Keyblade87 Well. You're not currently delaying anyone, since you're in a one-on-one by yourself.

@Pink Madness ... Aouuuw. Alright. Well posted.

@Rune_Alchemist Teh-heh. Yupp. Nicely posted. Moving on. So, assuming nobody stops you, I take it your next post will be in Route 2 at once? Or did you intend something strange at home? Haha.

In the event of disappearing players, I actually have something of a waiting list of people that PMd me during the initial recruitment phase but came just too late, so I would be looking in with them first. But, not yet.

@Delta44@Pyromaniacwolf@Pirouette. How're ya doing?

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

I'm just going to type down my thoughts after reading the entries that weren't mine.

And she was quoted as saying...

... Hm. Does ”me” and ”tragedy” rhyme? It certainly doesn't according to my mind, but since I was recently wrong about ”see” and ”reality”, it made me question reality.

… Haha, get it? Because it was my pronounciation of the word ”reality” that I questioned, and...

… Pffth, taha, hahahahahahaha... XD

You made me laugh. Good job. Though, there's too little circumstance that say that the person saying it actually hates what she got famous for, so you likely won't win, but... I laughed. That's a win enough, right? XD

OPRAH NO!

Um. Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuum. Uh. Khk. Hahahahaha. Gosh. That's... that's some mental imagery. I'm, uh, unsure how to review this. XD

I was amused, estranged and I don't know what. It was a funny read, though, with some real strangeness going on here. I assume it means he became famous because... … … XD

Gosh. Poor kid. What a life he has lived. And yikes. That prison sentence. Hahahaha. I'm just, um. I'll leave the review to Terminal. Know I was amused by it. XD

For Ken

... Well. That was certainly unique. And yes, that last scene made me really want to slam my hands into my desk and go all Phoenix Wright with that poor contradictory testimony. Though, yes, that was entirely intentional. So, famous for something he hated, huh? It isn't exactly supremely clear, but it was made clear he didn't exactly agree with the racism around town, so becoming a hero for them to rally under and go to war for probably wouldn't have been entirely agreeable with him, no. Haha.

It's nicely written. I'm finding myself at a loss for more to say. Randomly finding aliens on the roadside is weird, but that was intentional. I believe you got across what you wanted to. Haha.

Closure

I believe this story would have benefited from a bit more information. I see what's going on, she became famous for killing someone she was close to because he was a demon or something, when it was entirely an accident. But, that last paragraph ended so very quickly, and I'm not entirely sure who exactly she put a knife through. A little too many commas there. Hm.

But, yes. Your method of telling a story is fine, I just would have liked to know a little more and see a more properly expanded last part. That's the part that the whole labour was about, after all, I'd like to hear a bit more of it. That's that.

The Cook-Off

Weeeeeeeeeeell. I am afraid I must comment, it's not all that appealing to monitor someone who's constantly in a bad mood. XD

But, yeah. As far as I can see, you've definitely accomplished the labour. It was obvious how the entry was going to go from the first surprise to the last, your narrative technique is as sharp as ever. But, yes. Ethan wasn't very appealing to listen to. Especially not when he was being so very rude to the hosts or how in the last scene he started rambling again. When on TV, he could at least have been on his best behavior... But suppose that's not a requirement. Oh, well. Yeah, my enjoyment of the entry was unfortunately affected by your choice of character.

That aside, nice story. That's about that. Haha.