I would be interested if you are still accepting :)
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We are! The link to the OOC is in the first post; please submit your CS there. Glad to have more people here!
Understood and thanks!
I've edited that bio sentence to be more in line with the plot now (please let me know if that works or if you'd like to see something different) and certainly have no intention of making the Kevlar vest overpowered. I just figured if he intended to fight any sort of crime without any protection at all, he'd be insane. As it sits, the majority of his body is unprotected and the kevlar itself is not impenetrable - rifles and any large artillery can shred it and it will only be on as part of his 'super suit' covering his torso.
On the invisibility thing, I'm not even sure if I plan on using it - I'm mostly just offering up paths of evolution for the ability. However, if we did go down the invisibility route, I think it'd be more of a Predator type of invisible where you can see the light bent as long as you're looking for it and any motion would be a dead giveaway.
That all sounds good to me! It sounds like you have a good character here. Your Sparkly Edgelord is approved; you can post him in the Characters tab and I'll send you a link to the Discord server.
For your consideration:
Very good CS! Contrasts are great and you did it well. I think the one thing that I'd change is that for plot reasons, nobody is revealing that they got powers after the meteor hit. As far as the world knows, people with powers are dead to the virus, at least until the night the RP begins. I don't think you'd need to change much with your biography, it's fine otherwise.
I think I'd just be careful with not making the kevlar vest (and invisibility in the future) OP, but that doesn't really require any changes on your CS. Just read the rules and make the change I suggested and you should be good :)
Just for everyone's knowledge, @MagratheanWhale and I discussed his CS via PM and it's already approved.
If it's possible for her character to one day be like that in the far future, do you think my character could be as powerful as I originally had him?
I think you're overemphasizing the importance of power here. In the future the heroes will power up, but writing with other people is the important thing here, and your original CS basically had 10 characters each as powerful as an individual PC. It's not really fun to write if one player does everything and my goal to create a fun environment that people can write in.
I did make the OOC thread; it is located here: roleplayerguild.com/topics/186904-ris…
@Izurichand @AceSorou - feel free to put your CSes in the Characters tab after you read the rules section; as for everyone else, I look forward to seeing your characters! I'm mentioning a ton of people below, so my apologies if I miss anyone.
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I'm posting here so I can edit it later if needed.
If you're here from the new interest check thread, some of this may be out of date. Please let me know if you have any questions!
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You have super powers! Whether it’s the ability to fly, run really fast, or shoot lasers out of your eyes, you have an ability that sets you apart from the rest of humanity. You aren’t a big name hero, though, and you aren’t even some obscure expert with your powers. In fact, you’ve only had your powers for a week at the most.
This is a good thing.
If you had your powers any longer than that, you’d probably be dead.
You see, before you got your abilities, a deadly virus infected everyone with powers. The aptly named Supervirus caused heroes to die like flies while ordinary people were just fine. Some disappeared before their demise, but the result was the same; people with super powers were extinct! That is, until a week ago.
That was when the meteor struck. Despite nobody being injured, the local news covered it extensively since it took place in a local park in your Midwestern hometown. And maybe it was just a coincidence, but soon after this happened, you gained your powers. And for some reason, you haven’t come down with the virus like the others. You’ve decided that you should do something positive with this new ability you have, but you’re not sure what yet.
Now it is an ordinary Friday night in Lafayette City. You hear the news; the Precious Metal Vault is being robbed! People have tried this before, but this was far from ordinary for a few reasons:
One: this is the first time it happened since all the people with powers died, and
Two: the group responsible is led by a well-known supervillain who should be dead from the virus.
Wherever you are right now, this is when you decide you’ll help the city and stop the people responsible for this.
What you don’t know at the time is that this is just the beginning of a greater journey for you, one that will undoubtedly test your resolve and ability to work with other heroes to help stop a villainous plot.
Do you have what it takes to be a hero?
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So to summarize the synopsis above, this roleplay is about a group of rookie super heroes who end up teaming up to stop an evil scheme. I don’t want to give away too much of the plot, but I do plan on this being more involved than just “stop the villain of the week.” A CS is here for your use:
New Information:
First, for the sake of having an enjoyable RP experience for everyone, I have some rules that I’m listing below:
1) You are not Superman, Wolverine, or any other hero like that. In fact, these heroes do not exist. If you want to have the ability to fly, that’s cool, but do it in an original way please.
2) Don’t be a jerk. I think this is self-explanatory. Nobody wants to roleplay with jerks.
3) Your hero is not going to be super skilled with their powers right away. Not only is this boring, but part of the point of this is that it’s fun to see your characters grow and face real stakes.
4) That being said, I’m not looking for an excuse to kill everyone off either. That isn’t fun to write.
5) No smut, extremely graphic torture, or gore please. A common-sense PG-13 rating is what I’m going for. If people have sex or something, fade to black. I’m not looking to write an episode of Teletubbies, just use common sense.
6) No politics please. Based on my experience nobody is going to convince anyone else of their views anyway.
7) Please use proper spelling and grammar. I’m not the grammar police, but it makes writing look so much nicer.
8) I'm not looking for big essays here; just two or three quality paragraphs per post. If you want to write longer, cool, but quality beats quantity every time.
9) If you have a concern about the RP, let me know. Remember, I am only human, so I can’t read minds and I will likely make mistakes as well.
10) Please put the phrase “electric Pokemon” somewhere in the post with your CS so I know you’ve read these rules.
11) If you have to leave the RP temporarily or permanently, just let me know and we can work something out. I understand that life can get busy and priorities can shift. It’s easier to be told of this than it is to wonder where someone is for a week.
12) No healing powers please. This is both for plot reasons and because there's less at stake if you can heal your teammate's injuries.
13) Most importantly, have fun! I’m not looking for a bunch of drama here; I want this to be something we all enjoy.
If you have any questions, please let me know. I also plan on making a Discord server for our use; once your CS is accepted, I will send you a link to it. I look forward to writing with you!
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You have super powers! Whether it’s the ability to fly, run really fast, or shoot lasers out of your eyes, you have an ability that sets you apart from the rest of humanity. You aren’t a big name hero, though, and you aren’t even some obscure expert with your powers. In fact, you’ve only had your powers for a week at the most.
This is a good thing.
If you had your powers any longer than that, you’d probably be dead.
You see, before you got your abilities, a deadly virus infected everyone with powers. The aptly named Supervirus caused heroes to die like flies while ordinary people were just fine. Some disappeared before their demise, but the result was the same; people with super powers were extinct! That is, until a week ago.
That was when the meteor struck. Despite nobody being injured, the local news covered it extensively since it took place in a local park in your Midwestern hometown. And maybe it was just a coincidence, but soon after this happened, you gained your powers. And for some reason, you haven’t come down with the virus like the others. You’ve decided that you should do something positive with this new ability you have, but you’re not sure what yet.
Now it is an ordinary Friday night in Lafayette City. You hear the news; the Precious Metal Vault is being robbed! People have tried this before, but this was far from ordinary for a few reasons:
One: this is the first time it happened since all the people with powers died, and
Two: the group responsible is led by a well-known supervillain who should be dead from the virus.
Wherever you are right now, this is when you decide you’ll help the city and stop the people responsible for this.
What you don’t know at the time is that this is just the beginning of a greater journey for you, one that will undoubtedly test your resolve and ability to work with other heroes to help stop a villainous plot.
Do you have what it takes to be a hero?
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So to summarize the synopsis above, this roleplay is about a group of rookie super heroes who end up teaming up to stop an evil scheme. I don’t want to give away too much of the plot, but I do plan on this being more involved than just “stop the villain of the week.” A CS is here for your use:
New Information:
First, for the sake of having an enjoyable RP experience for everyone, I have some rules that I’m listing below:
1) You are not Superman, Wolverine, or any other hero like that. In fact, these heroes do not exist. If you want to have the ability to fly, that’s cool, but do it in an original way please.
2) Don’t be a jerk. I think this is self-explanatory. Nobody wants to roleplay with jerks.
3) Your hero is not going to be super skilled with their powers right away. Not only is this boring, but part of the point of this is that it’s fun to see your characters grow and face real stakes.
4) That being said, I’m not looking for an excuse to kill everyone off either. That isn’t fun to write.
5) No smut, extremely graphic torture, or gore please. A common-sense PG-13 rating is what I’m going for. If people have sex or something, fade to black. I’m not looking to write an episode of Teletubbies, just use common sense.
6) No politics please. Based on my experience nobody is going to convince anyone else of their views anyway.
7) Please use proper spelling and grammar. I’m not the grammar police, but it makes writing look so much nicer.
8) I'm not looking for big essays here; just two or three quality paragraphs per post. If you want to write longer, cool, but quality beats quantity every time.
9) If you have a concern about the RP, let me know. Remember, I am only human, so I can’t read minds and I will likely make mistakes as well.
10) Please put the phrase “electric Pokemon” somewhere in the post with your CS so I know you’ve read these rules.
11) If you have to leave the RP temporarily or permanently, just let me know and we can work something out. I understand that life can get busy and priorities can shift. It’s easier to be told of this than it is to wonder where someone is for a week.
12) No healing powers please. This is both for plot reasons and because there's less at stake if you can heal your teammate's injuries.
13) Most importantly, have fun! I’m not looking for a bunch of drama here; I want this to be something we all enjoy.
If you have any questions, please let me know. I also plan on making a Discord server for our use; once your CS is accepted, I will send you a link to it. I look forward to writing with you!
@Zapdos
I see~ alright, got it. Well, all fictional universes are in essence subjective to the whims of the creator, so it's not a bad thing, as I said with my "Your word is Law as the GM" statement.
MGR is short for Metal Gear Rising, an action hack-and-slash video game developed by Platinum Games and released in 2013. (Wikipedia Article)
Raiden refers to the main protagonist of said game, and his abilities and gimmicks are the main inspiration for Camille, as noted in the Trivia section of her CS.
This video perfectly illustrates my main reference on how Camille fights, and also the fact that steel-cutting slice slice is most of the gameplay:
Or, to be more specific, how she'll eventually become at the peak of her power. She's a rookie now after all!
Ah, I see. That's pretty cool action! Since Camile will be part of a team, she hopefully won't have as much need to slice giant mechs by herself :P
@zapdos Changes made, blurb complete. Also, I'm not trying to "win" the RP. I'm trying to tell a good story. Don't worry.
Thanks for doing that! The CS looks good, it is approved. When I make the OOC, feel free to put it in the characters tab.
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Those are fair assessments!
Yeah~ I had the feeling that she's a bit too strong for a week-old superhero career, but since I had no benchmark to compare her against, I decided to lie on the stronger side then nerf as necessary, instead of the other way around.
Also, I have specific replies to this part of your review:
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If we're going by Marvel and/or DC stuff? I don't know... it's pretty wild there, anything goes, a sword that can cut through concrete or steel is even nowhere the strangest thing around.
If we're going by Raiden from MGR, his sword cutting through steel is like 99% of the gameplay, it even has a whole in-combat minigame revolving on how to best cut those steel stuff, just so you have a full context on why I put that in.
Regardless, this is your universe and as the GM, your word is Law. If a supernatural sword in this universe can't cut through steel or concrete, then so it shall be.
Finally, and most importantly, I've made the edits!
Fair point regarding the nerfs.
Regarding the sword in a Marvel, DC or MGR context; I've never paid too much attention to those universes (idk what MGR even stands for lol), my knowledge of stuff like Spiderman is very casual. I know more about the "lore" (if you want to call it that) of a years-old superhero RP on this site than about those things. I just try to keep in mind if the powers seem to have any corresponding weaknesses or gaps in their usage; I admit it might be subjective, but I do the best I can to keep it fun and balanced.
My impression based on what you wrote of the sword was it was more mechanical than mythical, so thanks for letting me know that. I'm not opposed to that aspect of her power "upgrading" (becoming stronger, however you can think to phrase it) to eventually be able to cut through those things as the story progresses.
Anyway, the CS looks good now, so once I post the OOC you can put Camile in the characters tab.
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God, my character comparatively looks low effort. And isn't nearly as powerful...
Any tips on presentation?
Personally, my formatting tool is Microsoft Word :P Izurich has better formatting than I do though, so go with her methods if you want a fancy CS.
Here it is, @zapdos. Let me know if there's any issues.
Now that we discussed it in PM, the character's powers are much more reasonable than they were originally. A few minor quibbles:
1) There's no way a 20 year old is a librarian (at least in the US); you need a master's degree for that and those jobs are in high demand. Age him up a bit (say 26 at the least) or give him a different profession. Call this me being pedantic if you'd like; my career is in HR so I try to be aware of things like this :P
2) Just write a basic blurb about his personality please. It doesn't need to be extensive and you are welcome to develop it as you write, but a basic idea of what he's like is needed.
3) I don't want to see Robin summon Narumi into a dangerous situation where she's attacked so he can go "dur hur, look its dangerous, go fight now" - like I said in the PMs, the summon is fine as a teacher, not for combat. I don't think that requires much change on the CS, I just wanted you to know this.
Make those two changes and you should be good!
I am interested :D
It is time that I busted out my idea for a Superhero who has a voice related power. Her Superhero name will be The Punisher, and bad jokes are her weapons.
Is it me? Because lots of people say my jokes are bad, even though my puns are great :P
@Zapdos Aaand my CS is up for review!
Alright, so I looked through your CS. I like the effort you put into Camile and her backstory, but her powers are way too strong. These heroes are meant to be rookies, not experts. I think the super strength is fine, but adding in the speed and agility basically make her Mecha Girl Superman, and that's pretty OP (plus another person is making a super speed character). Or she could have enhanced human abilities? Basically, the nanobots allow her to be in peak physical condition, having abilities beyond most humans but without her being Superman (if that makes any sense). I think that plus her research skills and family wealth is pretty impressive as it is.
Also, I'd say Rose Noire would need to be nerfed a little. I'm fine with it cutting through most materials, but a sword shouldn't be able to cut through things like concrete and steel as if they're butter.
Let me know what you think; I can tell you put some thought into your CS and I'm impressed with how quickly you made it.
This looks really interesting, craving a superhero rp.
Question, I know its a bunch of new heroes but are superheroes a set "profession" in this world? like do heroes wear costumes comic style and what not? Do those who discover they have power want to create a secret identity to protect a semblance of their old life?
Glad to see more interest! Superheroes were a profession and they wore costumes; the virus wiped them all out. If you had powers, you want to have a way of hiding them; super villains existed and powers paint a big target on your back. There is an organization of super heroes in this world, but how it is constituted now that the virus exists will be something to be revealed in story.
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