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Look! It's an Orc!

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accepted.
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I see that this roleplay states that it is open for applications, but I want to make sure. Is the joining status still at the application state?
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I see that this roleplay states that it is open for applications, but I want to make sure. Is the joining status still at the application state?


Yes you can apply. c:
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Here is my attempt!

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After the New Year, I'd love to join if I may. But I'm somewhat lost on the plot...
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Here is my attempt!


Hi there. Thanks for your time and effort. I love his look and personality.
Well written, but you seem to have some misunderstandings and need more information.

Your occupation and subspecies of demon will not be accepted. The roleplay is settled in an alternation dimension where Earth is called Avalia. The GMs and I feel that it is best you change this as in this RP, demons come from an abyss and the Gods hate them.
Celestials will be the ones who help souls pass. It is not so much like the Greek underworld. The spiritual realm here would be on
Mount Celestia. There is no God of Abyss, just Lilith who is the mother of demons. The only beings that can reforge spirits into other races are the Gods.

As for your history, he can be found in an orphanage and mistaken for something else, but he cannot start
as a human(They are unnatural in Avalia as well), he would be a demon that was born in the abyss and got there somehow. Could also be a demon who didn't know he was one.

Great job on the stats. You did this very fair.

However the abilities:
- No chronosense. This can lead to potential issues such as the character-revealing another's secrets, etc.
- Life force absorption is too overpowered. Maybe replaceable with a weakening touch rather than straight-up killing them.
- Arcane knowledge is kinda vague and needs more detail to understand what you are going for.
- No Death Realm and Living realm connection
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After the New Year, I'd love to join if I may. But I'm somewhat lost on the plot...


We'd love to have you, Poohead!
Are you able to divulge what confuses you or do you just the plot broken down into basics?
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We'd love to have you, Poohead!
Are you able to divulge what confuses you or do you just the plot broken down into basics?

The second one if you would, please. Normally I'd try and read up a bit but it's close to Christmas and I work for Fedex so I am swamped haha.

And thank you :)
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Hi there. Thanks for your time and effort. I love his look and personality.
Well written, but you seem to have some misunderstandings and need more information.

Your occupation and subspecies of demon will not be accepted. The roleplay is settled in an alternation dimension where Earth is called Avalia. The GMs and I feel that it is best you change this as in this RP, demons come from an abyss and the Gods hate them.
Celestials will be the ones who help souls pass. It is not so much like the Greek underworld. The spiritual realm here would be on
Mount Celestia. There is no God of Abyss, just Lilith who is the mother of demons. The only beings that can reforge spirits into other races are the Gods.

As for your history, he can be found in an orphanage and mistaken for something else, but he cannot start
as a human(They are unnatural in Avalia as well), he would be a demon that was born in the abyss and got there somehow. Could also be a demon who didn't know he was one.

Great job on the stats. You did this very fair.

However the abilities:
- No chronosense. This can lead to potential issues such as the character-revealing another's secrets, etc.
- Life force absorption is too overpowered. Maybe replaceable with a weakening touch rather than straight-up killing them.
- Arcane knowledge is kinda vague and needs more detail to understand what you are going for.
- No Death Realm and Living realm connection


Thank you for your time and explanations! I will have to think more about the species I want him to be and what I want him to do before rewriting and getting back here for another chance!
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Summary of Plot

In another dimension, the planet Earth is referred to as Avalia in a land full of many different races who all have their own rulers and mildly stick to themselves.

Long ago, humans had been allowed to visit Avalia through the use of dimensional rifts created by powerful elves. Humans from various time periods were able to be summoned and share their technological advances and ideas with Avalians.

Tales of the creatures of Avalia such as fairies and elves populated the stories of humans on Earth

Then one day, a subspecies of elf came, that being the dark elves, and they were shunned by the light elves for being different and being thought to be evil for using dark magic.

A war breaks out, about 1,200 years from the present day. The light elves able to summon humans are killed and elves with such skill no longer exist. The skill takes hundreds of years to master.

Dark elf king was killed in war, but his twin children escaped and the race was banished to the frigid and harsh north in Daka Island.

None of the other races did anything to stop any mistreatment of the dark elves. However, it was foretold by prophets that the dark elves will train and one day be able to conquer Avalia in the next war and take over new territories. Their vengeful spirit could mean slavery and misery for all of Avalia.

Years later, there's been unrest and fear of the dark elves rising so the light elves formulate a plan to summon humans once again now that enough time has passed for someone to learn to summon humans.

Humans, once in Avalia, possess very unique and very powerful magic, with each one possessing control over one element; water, wind, earth, fire, or electricity. Since light and dark neutralize each other, human’s magic holds the capability to stand up to the dark elves.

Dark elves catch wind of this plan and decide to make a move first, kidnapping the heirs/highly valuable person of each of the major races and, using magical technology, execute them in front of the entirety of Avalia the night before the summoning.

Dark elves plan an attack on the light elves the day of the summoning.

The humans are summoned in Sun Elf Kingdom and immediately leave with the two light elf princesses: Annya and Rosaria.

Light Elves summon humans secretly in other parts of Avalia as well.

Dark elves work with a demon named Vrexen to summon the seven sins, some of the strongest demons in the Abyss, to help hunt any who stand against the dark elves. Dark elves agree that they will help the demons build a place in Avalia for them outside of the Abyss.

The demihuman king is cowardly and submits to the leaders of the dark elves, who are a pair of twins referred to as the Twin-Headed Dragon. Roshmi is then conquered by the dark elves.

The dark elf army reaches Sun Elf Kingdom that day and they fight into the night.
They manage to destroy some supplies, but ultimately the light elves are victorious in protecting the kingdom.

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