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My character synopsis is more like a character novel.

Whoops.
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My character synopsis is more like a character novel.

Whoops.


And his name. *Chuckles*

Codename is Ark. Real name is Noah. Turns into animals.

I see what you did there >_> haha

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And his name. *Chuckles*

Codename is Ark. Real name is Noah. Turns into animals.

I see what you did there >_> haha

Cheers!


Go big or go home haha
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Alright, for those curious, I have finished my character sheet.

Roman and I have begun character reviews and will get back to you all soon.
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Alright, got some verdicts!

The following characters have been ACCEPTED:

◼ Weston, Marcus as portrayed by @Hillan

◼ Wenrong, Jiao-long as portrayed by @Odin

◼ Brooks, Felix as portrayed by @Lionhearted

◼ Whäner, Esther as portrayed by @Prisk

The following characters will be considered after AMENDMENTS:

◼ Harper, Ivy as portrayed by @BoyMom69035
The only issue preventing acceptance at this point is that we find the powers are almost a little on the weak side. We have concerns about Ivy being able to heal people by taking their injuries without any method to protect or heal herself. We'd like to see something added to her ability to bolster her a little bit.

◼ Hope, Benjamin as portrayed by @Aeolian
The sheet is solid but we have some concerns about the abilities and how the drawbacks feel very limited. If we're both understanding the way the powers have been described, it seems like it could be simplified to intangibility. The other thing that sticks out is that the largest drawbacks to using his power don't happen until after he finishes using it, so we'd like to see the limitations and weaknesses reworked as well.

◼ Estrella, Genessy as portrayed by @Ejected
There's two issues we found when reviewing this sheet, our primary concern however is the powers. Genessy seems quite overpowered and although strain of creating clones is mentioned, we're not exactly sure how many clones she can create before feeling that strain. The entire process is a little on the vague side and Roman and I both feel as though two to three clones should be her max production rate especially at this point. Additionally, neither of us like how the Hive Mind shifts when the 'Host' body dies as it makes her feel somewhat invincible.

The second issue is that her personality feels contradictive. On one hand, she's a social butterfly but on the other hand, she's a introvert and stand offish. It just feels like two conflicting personalities, which could work really well if her Hyperhuman ability was to create one duplicate thus creating a dual personality but in this case I don't know if it works.


Lastly the following characters are declined, Roman and I both appeciate your interest and the time you took to create character sheets but at this time we don't feel like the characters are a good fit.

◼ Chan, Mei as portrayed by @Bee

◼ Harmon, Jocelyn as portrayed by @Almalthia

Thank you to everyone for their interest and I look forward to getting this RP going.
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@Lord Wraith ahh, is it too late for new applications?
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Small change of plans...While I’d really love to be a part of this amazing rp, I’m a bit busy at the moment, and wouldn’t be able to participate actively. I might just follow it for the writing though :)
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@Lord Wraith ahh, is it too late for new applications?


I'll still consider new apps.

Small change of plans...While I’d really love to be a part of this amazing rp, I’m a bit busy at the moment, and wouldn’t be able to participate actively. I might just follow it for the writing though :)


Okay well pleased that you want to follow along either way. Maybe an opportunity will show up down the road where it works out for you to jump in.
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@Lord Wraith @RomanThank you very much for the feedback.



Here is the revised character sheet.

-I took your suggestion and changed the power to intangibility.

-I also slightly adjusted the history so it aligns with the new power.

-Limitations and Weaknesses were also changed to fit the new power you suggested.

-Codename was changed to Passover (meaning to "pass without touching" and a shout out to his Jewish heritage).

Cheers!
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@Lord Wraith I was hoping for some commentary on what you liked and what you didn't like as much, but an acceptance is an acceptance and I'll take it. Before I move it into the character bin (that's what you want, yes?) I would like to add that the name is Jiao-long, to avoid any long term naming issues before we even start.

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@Lord Wraith@Roman
The relationship sheet is something that we should fill out beforehand? I saw the the update/announcement, but I assume that's something that us 'accepted' people can work on now?

@Aeolian
You know what's interesting? Esther's and Benjamin's conflicting family histories. It could make for a decently dramatic subplot in the story. Perhaps doubt and suspicion directed at Esther, thinking that she is or will become her father is and grand father was? Maybe there is something to dig in there.

@Hillan
What will Marcus do when he works for Hyperhuman rights? Would it be something that's already on-going or something that he'll pick up along the story? Esther could potentially be all over it, wanting to help.
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@Lord Wraith I was hoping for some commentary on what you liked and what you didn't like as much, but an acceptance is an acceptance and I'll take it. Before I move it into the character bin (that's what you want, yes?) I would like to add that the name is Jiao-long, to avoid any long term naming issues before we even start.


Apologies, I don't generally make those mistakes. As for commentary I can get you some tomorrow when I have a bit less Jack Daniels in my system.

@Lord Wraith@Roman
The relationship sheet is something that we should fill out beforehand? I saw the the update/announcement, but I assume that's something that us 'accepted' people can work on now?


If you are an eager beaver you can definitely start it. I was going to update the formatting to make it a bit easier for everyone but that won't happen until tomorrow.

P.S This post brought to you by the magic of predictive texting!
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Mmkay, updated Ivy's CS
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@Hillan
What will Marcus do when he works for Hyperhuman rights? Would it be something that's already on-going or something that he'll pick up along the story? Esther could potentially be all over it, wanting to help.


I'm not sure what concrete plans he has. Probably trying to mobilize people and trying to build a community for Hypes and those who don't believe every Hype's a weapon and should be locked up. He's got plenty of resources and people skills to try and make something happen. He's very new to being 'out' as a Hype, so he'll probably need some time to adjust and mature in his identity before he starts making big moves.
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@BoyMom69035, Ivy is accepted.

@Aeolian, Benjamin is accepted.

@Prisk, @Odin, @Hillan, @Lionhearted and the aforementioned, the relationship sheet template has been updated for ease of use.
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@Aeolian
You know what's interesting? Esther's and Benjamin's conflicting family histories. It could make for a decently dramatic subplot in the story. Perhaps doubt and suspicion directed at Esther, thinking that she is or will become her father is and grand father was? Maybe there is something to dig in there.


I noticed that too; how drastically different their father relationships are. Benjamin admired his father and Esther was scarred by hers. I'm currently trying to figure out who he would be friends with. Eventhough Ben might have his suspicions of her, I imagine Esther would probably be one of his few friends since she's mute and her innate empathy allows her to understand him better than most. Also, they have the daddy thing going on.

"My dad's a Mad Scientist and mentally tortured me for years."

"My dad's dead."

"Oh cool..."

XD! Honestly though, I do see some kind of interesting dynamic between them. Whatever it may end up being.

Cheers!
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Apologies, I don't generally make those mistakes. As for commentary I can get you some tomorrow when I have a bit less Jack Daniels in my system.


Cheers, and no worries. These mistakes are easy to make anyway, I just wanted to avoid having it seep into the IC (at that point I'd probably change his name to Jai, tbh).
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Alright cool and I haven't forgotten about your commentary so I will make sure you get that.

Also all accepted players can move their sheets into the character bin.
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I noticed that too; How drastically different their father relationships are. Benjamin admired his father and Esther was scarred by hers. I'm currently trying to figure out who he would be friends with. Eventhough Ben might have his suspicions of her, I imagine Esther would probably be one of his few friends since she's mute and her innate empathy allows her to understand him better than most. Also, they have the daddy thing going on.

"My dad's a Mad Scientist and mentally tortured me for years."

"My dad's dead."

"Oh cool..."

XD! Honestly though, I do see some kind of interesting dynamic between them. Whatever it may end up being.

Cheers!


Awesome. I think their friendship could also have a deeper statement to it—Ben being of Jewish heritage and Esther's father and grandfather sympathizing with World War II German ideology, which makes them opposites to say the least. Their friendship would be a rebellion in itself.

The dad thing is a good lead-in for Esther trying out the whole hallucination/dream side of her ability. Maybe Ben would agree to having her practice on him at some point and have him meet his father based on memories? Lots of possibilities for bonding and better understanding.

I'm not sure what concrete plans he has. Probably trying to mobilize people and trying to build a community for Hypes and those who don't believe every Hype's a weapon and should be locked up. He's got plenty of resources and people skills to try and make something happen. He's very new to being 'out' as a Hype, so he'll probably need some time to adjust and mature in his identity before he starts making big moves.


I was thinking that Esther would look up to Marcus, like a 'fan' or something due to who he is, wanting to join his 'club' as she would call it. I'm not sure about the timeline here, but either she would be somewhat into it already or beginning to see it this way. It's tricky to explain, but I think I've seen this kind of dynamic somewhere in a movie or show.

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