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Current i can't believe it's already christmas today
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*skeletal hand emerges from an unmarked grave* the drive thru forgot my side order
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Imagine having an opinion on rpg dot com
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Let’s play a game where you try to sext me and I call the police
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i take it back im cringing at byrd because im also horny. thanks mate
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Maybe the real plot was the friends we made along the way. [Last Updated: April 3, 2022]


I'm 26 years old and I have learned not to share too much of my personal life on the internet. I work as an English and writing tutor at a local college.

I love literature and poetry, and I also enjoy writing and I like to think I'm not half bad at it. I first started writing as a hobby with online roleplay at the start of 2010, and I've slowly drifted away from it in recent years. I enjoy most genres, but if I had to pick a couple of favorites, they would be sci-fi and high fantasyβ€”heavy enosis on the high fantasy. Some of my favorite characters have come from Elder Scrolls roleplays, since it appeals to the D&D nerd in me.

I have a tendency to get carried away with making my character sheets. I like telling their stories in the sheet sometimes even more than the roleplay itself, which depends on the roleplay itself of course. I want my readers to know how their background influences them as a person, how their personality bleeds into their appearance, and I love watching characters overcome their personal tragedies and finding their true selves as they watch their identities shatter and come back together. I've always been a fan of characters overcoming their weaknesses and obstacles and I try to make that show in many of my characters. Therefore, many of the narratives I explore come from a place of vulnerability, but I try to balance the heavy themes with light whimsy.

I also try to research whatever it is I'm writing about so that I'm not just spitting into the wind - unless that's what my character is doing, in which case I try to make sure that's made clear in my writing. It’s kind of hard to define my style, as I’m influenced by all sorts of schools of criticism; dark romanticism, modernism, post-modernism, Marxism, feminism, post-structuralismβ€”I have a lot of isms in my pocket. Nathaniel Hawthorne is one of my favorite dark romantic authors, Dickinson is one of my favorite naturalist poets, Judith Ortiz Cofer, Langston Hughes, and Robert Frostβ€”they’ve all in some ways informed my writing, as well as many others. I even tend to look to some of my fellow guild mates for inspiration or analyze what I like about their writing and see what I can do to improve my own through their example.




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I've been meaning to branch out from the genre I've typecast myself into. Hope to see you in a future post-apoc roleplay!
I will abstain from voting, but I can definitely provide some feedback. I've taken classes in literary theory, creative writing, and had some training in different schools of criticism, so I hope the contestants find it useful.

Metamorphosis: My favorite wordplay is likening the dead mother's wings as colorful robes, which gives a humanizing aspect to nature. In a prompt that inherently invites ecocriticism, this does well to make us care about the subjects in the work, but it also brings humanity to the forefront of our minds which is in constant conflict with nature. That's a good dichotomy I think. The formatting of the poem adds a cute little visual to the work that, I think, would be most effective if the piece does not explicitly state that it was about a butterfly. Perhaps continue likening it to humanity as a parallel to nature, and the formatting clues you in to the actual nature of the work. That it starts with conception, followed by death, then birth, metamorphosis, and actualization makes it feel like a fully realized cycle of life. Where it falls flat, I think, might be in the final two stanzas. Perhaps it was to keep to the formatting, but keep in mind that structure and rhyme exists to serve the poem, not the poem existing to serve the structure or rhyme. The penultimate stanza is conceptually sound, but it doesn't have the same transitions as the preceding stanza and therefore comes across as abrupt. The final line of the last stanza possibly could've used better word choice as, reciting it aloud, sounds similarly abrupt. This is not to say that abruptness does not have its place in poetry, but having uniform throughout a poem is important to flow. Experiment with more metaphors, symbolism, and "a single unitary effect," which is when an entire poem serves to culminate in one particular feeling or emotion.

The Lepidopterist: There is a lot to love about what was done here, and I personally have a strange sort of fetish for surrealist art and literature and yours definitely begins venturing into that territory by the very end. There isn't a whole lot to decipher until the very end, and even then, it's little so it's difficult to do so -- but even so, sometimes art doesn't require a lot of unpacking, and many pieces of modernist art exist solely to make fun of "high culture." The microfiction feels more like an exercise in description, as the setting and character were beautifully landscaped, only for my expectation of it to be nothing more than that to be suddenly subverted. I can see my old classmates spend a few minutes of pondering what the significance of eating the butterfly is. Does he intend to be like them? Is he just weird? If he smiled at the end, that'd be an interesting parallel to the genus name being "difficult to swallow without smiling" - and speaking of, there's an interesting trend of butterflies being consumed. Between removing the predators of coyotes, birds, creatures biting their bitter wings, swallowing the name, and the character swallowing the butterfly by the very end. Does the character see itself as sparing the butterfly from a harsh fate, and as a kindred spirit, would he too rather be swallowed than live in nasty, brutish freedom? The story gives no answers, but that its able to raise so many questions is a good sign. My personal preference would ask for more weirdness like that sprinkled intermittently throughout, but this does provide a nice and unexpected punch at the end that makes it fine as it is. As much as I'd also like more as another person said, having endings like these allows the story to stick with the reader.


A bit sappy: There's a nice little bittersweetness to the poem that I'm sure many of us are all too familiar with, and I'm sure we've all wondered at some point in our lives what it would've been like to be an animal or part of nature as some kind of reprieve from the burden of sentience. As a disclaimer: I personally don't like monorhyme poems. If you ever played the same key on a piano or the same cord on a guitar repeatedly, it wouldn't sound like music. A rhyme is a tool to denote parallel within a work, and if every line ends with the same rhyme, each line better be tightly bound to one another. As soon as you begin to struggle, and the poem becomes a slave or tool for rhyme, it doesn't work. My recommendation, in order to make the best use of monorhyme, is to experiment with punctuation and enjambment. Enjambment is one of my favorite poetic tools, and in my opinion, poets never use it often enough. It allows you to change the flow of your poetry and still maintain the rhyme. If you have hard stops at the end of each line in a monorhyme, it can sound flat. Instances of enjambment in monorhyme can be found in "Monorhyme in the Shower" by Dick Davis, or the famous song Willy Wonka sings while their boat flies through the tunnel.

The Butterfly: Making an anagram with your poem is cute and clever, and like "A bit sappy," I'm sensing a little bit of envy toward the butterfly. I have a feeling that before the end of the day, I'm gonna pick up a connotation between butterflies and freedom. However, an anagram cannot be the only thing a poem has going for it. You don't necessarily need a rhyming scheme, but try experimenting with metaphors and specificity. Poems are usually short, right? Shorter than stories, at least. In order to make up for that, poems use metaphors to pack even more meaning into their size. Specificity and word choice is important because it can help you paint a more vivid picture. Instead of calling things "colorful" you can use certain colors, or highly specific colors or metaphors with a warm and pleasant connotation, like cherry wine, dry honey, or churning ocean foam. Using multiple colors in your poem implicitly describes the setting as colorful without telling us explicitly -- showing instead of telling.


Butterfly: It's a haiku and it is short, so too will have to be my feedback. Haikus suffer more than any other kind of poetry of being small and, for that reason, need to make every word count. Metaphor is essential to packing as much meaning as possible into 17 combined syllables and having it really punch the reader. Nice job in fitting calignious into a haiku, first of all, and I can see the contrast between the calignious sky and a colorful butterfly -- experiment with words other than colorful, as it lacks in specificity -- and how that might denote hope. A nearly endless, gloomy void? The butterfly is a splash of color I'd love to see in watercolor on a canvas. A good, solid metaphor can really bring this haiku home. "See!" might be a wasted syllable, not that its devoid of meaning, but it doesn't contribute to impact. I already spoke of "colorful." How does "a speck of hope dawns" sound?

ΠΏΠΎΠ»ΡƒΠ΄Π΅Π½Π½ΠΎΠ΅ солнцС: I don't know any Russian, so I can only appreciate what you have half as well as it deserves, but I wanna start by saying I'm impressed that you managing to keep the syllable count the same in both Russian and English. There doesn't seem to be a rhyme scheme in English, but I have a sneaking suspicion that it does in Russian. I fear that there might be a lack of vocabulary equivalence, as the English translation doesn't seem very cohesive and I have trouble pinning down the relationship between lines. Midnight sun. Gold, glowing gentle blossom. A sleep fantasy. Are they dreaming? Does a sun in the night sky look like a glowing flower? Or is it talking about a sunflower under the night sky? Regardless, I'm not sure how the poem relates to the prompt unless one of the Russian words means butterfly.

I gave feedback to half of the works here, I'm stopping for now, and I'll come back later to give my feedback to the rest of the entries sans myself. Good work so far everyone! Also don't take anything said too personally, because I actually liked reading all of them. I just hope to help everyone how I can along the way. :insert your favorite emoji here:
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If you have a character idea, feel free to send me a message or we can chat here :) Would be happy to have you!

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That's a funny way of spelling sweet release.
She is lovely, @Lemons!
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What a fool you are. I'm a god. How can you kill a god? What a grand and intoxicating innocence. How could you be so naive? There is no escape. No Recall or Intervention can work in this place. Come. Lay down your weapons. It is not too late for my mercy.


The gravity of the day's mission was not lost on the company's chaplain. The black robed priest was up since before dawn in meditation and prayer, and finding himself once again in solemn contemplation over the map and the figures and units scrawled and placed over it. The heat of the coming day was beginning to rise, and he knew that the Jikari sun would not favor a drawn out battle for the fighters of the company. His fingers were tracing the distance from the treeline to the tower, then resting on the figures representing the bandits.

He looked around at the company, assessing what their strengths and weaknesses were -- what little he knew of them, at least. There were many archers in the company, that much he knew. That is something they should capitalize on, though they would be at a disadvantage when firing up at the crossbowmen, who possessed the high ground and tower battlements. Still, taking them out would ensure the fewest casualties. With Iroh’s blessing, there wouldn’t be any.

β€œThe tower was made to be a defensible position,” Irae said with surprising levity, as he set down a cup of hot black tea in front of Amelia with a knowing look, β€œbut they’re looking for trade caravans, not armed battalions. If we charge in and they see our numbers, the men on the ground will retreat inside the tower and lock themselves in while their crossbows fire down on our people.”

His finger returned to the treeline and continued, β€œWhat we can do is have a couple of our own archers and crossbowmen fire shots at the crossbowmen manning the battlements first, from the cover of the treeline while the rest of our troops stay a bit further behind. It's no longer than two-hundred yards, so your bows should make it, but they won't be easy shots. If the men on the ground think we’re only a few people that they can take care of, the moment we lure them over is the moment we gain control of the battlefield. We can then take them out and immediately take the tower with few to no arrows taking out our own men.”

His critical eyes scanned over the men and women in the company. Having only been with this group for a few months, he only knew what a few of them were capable of and wasn’t necessarily filled with confidence, but he’d try to keep them from needlessly dying regardless. They probably thought similar of him, who didn’t look the part of the fighter and smelled too nice, like sandalwood, and too clean to be telling them what to do. But he hoped that through respecting the men and women he was serving, he’d be respected in return. Among the crowd he was scouring, faeries were scarce in the company but they were around. The ability to fly was a tactical advantage that they ought to capitalize on.

β€œThose with the ability to fly should probably scale the walls and enter the tower from the top while the ground troops enter the tower from the ground. It’s a classic pincer maneuver used to great effect in the Siege of Maceron. Any arguments?”
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